You left me.
I
Wanted you to stay.
I
Needed you to comfort me
In those hard times, not just in the good.
You left
Just when I needed you most.
I thought you were different.
I was wrong.
You’re just like the others,
Not willing to sacrifice your feelings for mine.
You never thought about what you did to me,
Because your life was way too busy.
I guess I never mattered that much to you.
If I did,
You would
Care about me.
You would make time to talk to me.
You would love me,
And I would love you back.
Too bad
This love will never be real.
It is not true
That you fall
In love once,
I’ve fallen for you many times since then.
But I have
Learned that
You can find someone else to love,
And they will help you through the hard times,
Because they return your love.
Author notes
count the words in each line. it is the first 32 numbers of pi.
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Comments
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Awwwww....Sooooo touching...and soooo true!!!! This was a wonderful story, and makes you believe that once your heart is broken, it can be repaired, and better than before!!! Very well written..and I love how you organized the word into pi..That was great!!!!!
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Very deep emotionally. I liked it.
In addition, I remember writing in this numeric style once as well. It was in class and i was giving my phone number to a friend but did not want it to get around the whole school. -
I've felt this way before, so I can sympathize. I like the emotions going through it and the way you can tell what's happening in just the few words.
While I love your format idea, it seems strange with this type of poem. I would have expected something more geeky I guess.
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Very moving
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I really like this
This is a great piece, I like the format
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It had a certain...fluidity to it, though non-rhyming poetry usually has a far different feel to it. Great poem, though. I can feel the understanding and I can somewhat see the emotion behind it.
And the format, as you said in the author's notes, is just awesome. xD
I don't think I've seen that before. Sweetness. Keep it up. ;D -
Interesting format. It wasn't very fluid, but when you explained why you wrote it that way, it really helped put it in perspective. I like it - it fits well with my contest since it writes like a "last farewell" type of letter so bravo! Good luck in my contest and thanks for entering!
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this seemed like a story
only shortened to be called a poem
but i like it
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Claps.
Good realization. I agree with this!
Keep writing.
- Adelaine
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