Can you smell it?1
The scent wafting towards us,2
Sweet and delicious,3
Perfume of 'freedom'.4
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Can you feel it?6
Tugging at our toes,7
Teasingly soft caresses,8
Of awaited 'Liberation'.9
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Can you hear it?11
Whispering our names,12
Beseechingly silent,13
The winds of 'Release'.14
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Can you see it?16
Just over the horizon,17
Fleeting glimpses,18
Of dawning 'Liberty'.19
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Run we must not,21
Savour the flavour,22
These cold shackels,23
Soon,24
No longer part of us.
Author notes
Written on: (24/11/08)
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It is the desire I admire...
Liberty only comes from within....
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Wow
really like this, starting each part with a question really brought it to life for me, flows lovely and clear too, keep it up xxxx
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Nice
I actually felt good reading this.. It was as if the beautiful scent wafted through my nose. I liken freedom to the smell of rain
But maybe to others, it can be as the poem says; perfume.
I particularly adored the honest hopefulness of this poem (especially the "Can you see it" part). It's something that is a bit lacking in the world now. I'm glad to find this in your poem; it evokes hope and a joyful feeling to me as well
Thanks so much for this piece. ^_^ I enjoyed reading it
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awesome
i really loved this so inspiring and i love the idea of freedom and peace and its a very well written piece you are very talented good job you should be proud lol good job keep on writing. -
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I really like the concept of this poetic piece, it's very inspiring, especially to people who are all about peace, liberty, and equality. These words spoke to me of freedom--both psychologically and literally.
Very original poem and good job!
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