When the Monsters Came

I wrote this poem for class and it is about the Dafurian Genocide and the Holocaust. I had to put myself in a different persons shoes and take a peek at what was happening. The poem is confusing becuase there are supposed to be different fonts for different people's perspectives but I can't get different fonts so here is a key for it.
* (star symbol) is a victim of the Holocaust
~ (squigly line) is a victim of the Darfurian Genocide
< (arrow pointing left) both victims speaking together1

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*I didn't understand
~How could they do this to us? 4

*Capturing towns
~Storming villages 5

*Baring that red symbol
~Riding those dark horses 6

*To them, we weren't human
~We were nothing to them 7

*Soon we were taken away
~Destruction rose in the village 8

*We were sent to camps to work
~We waited for them to find us 9

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*For the trucks to come
~For the village to burn 11

*To be taken to Auschwitz
~To lock eyes with our murderers 12

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*My belongings
~My family 15

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Author notes

I know that I write a lot about this kind of stuff but it's kind of hard not to think about it when I take a class about it for an hour and a half every day. I am very touched by it, I can't not think about it. Everyday I learn about someone knew who had died or is dying. Every thing I learn is terrifying, horrible, and unimaginably disgusting because these people are dying because of people just like them who are torturing and killing them. So if you read this please learn something about hatred and how far it can extend.

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  • Ludo Ossidi
    March 21

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    Completely agree with what you say in the Author notes; it's, to be honest, so horrible, words can't explain it. Although this is great - touching , yet concise.

    Only possible thing I could improve on is the line 'To be taken to Auschwitz' - imo it interrupts the flow - though that is probably the point.


    • Just Falling Apart
      March 22
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      Thanks! That line does interrupt the flow a bit. But at the time I couldn't think of anything else, now I can see all the possibilities that I could have put in that sentance. Thanks for reading and commenting!


  • Lachrymose.
    March 9
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    Wow, I LOVED this poem so much. I think it's great that you write about these issue that have effected our earth and are still effecting us today because it shows that people actually care about someone other than themselves. After all, it only takes on person to change the world. Really great writing, great message. Very lovely.

    • Just Falling Apart
      March 10
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      Thank you! It does helps a lot to know that people agree about this subject. There are some people that deny it even happened! And that pisses me off. More people need to be aware of what has happened and what is happening and I think spreading awarness through writing is a very good way... people just have to read it. Anyways, thank you so much for reading and commenting! And I am very glad that you understand it and agree with me about it!