-preview- lost soul except of chapter one

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The wind blew as Jessika Ling skipped down the empty street alone. Her long black hair, that had pink, white blonde and purple streaks, bounced with each heavy step she took. She had on old army boots that were several sizes too big.  Cracking her hands that had on fingerless pink leather gloves, she felt on her sides her wooden stakes.  She had on a filly white skirt that puffed out a bit like a tutu and a purple tube top. Her black eyes shifted around as the streetlights flickered on and off, but still she walked as if she were a kid going to her grandmother’s for a snack that lived across the street. She spun and jumped. She giggled as she banged on things she passed. A shadow passed over and she went stone cold, hands at her side where her stakes were ready to be used. She looked around before hearing the whistling noise from above and she jumped into action, a second or two behind as a vampire leaped from the lamppost, her hands quickly clasp her stakes in both hands and held them up as she bend down, too late the vamp recognized his mistake by the time he knew he landed heart first on her stake, turning to ash and blowing away with the wind. Quickly she got in fighter stance, standing with arms crossed, both stakes armed and ready as the undead came at her. She rushed at it, her hair flying behind her like a banner of death as jumped and met it head on. The next thing, she knew she was on the ground with only one stake. She hopped back up, and the thing hissed at her. 2

“Bitch.” 3

She tilted her head and grinned, getting back in stance, this time, knowing not to under estimate the vampiress. 4

“I try. What’d I do kill your boyfriend?” 5

“YOU ARE GOING TO DIE!!” 6

This time it came at her faster, whipping past like a goddamn Taz from the Looney Toons. Back flipping, Jessika got from her and jumped away as the beast tried to scratched her with her claws, she had grown and managed to get the front of her tank top, making her drop her stake. Jessika fell back against the cold brick of the building. 7

“Gotcha!” 8

Jessika’s head whipped around, and before she could recognize what she doing, a car flew and hit the vampiress, causing her to scream in pain as the car landed on her. Jessika fell to the ground, too disgusted with herself for using her disgusting curse 9

“It is said that only, the most powerful vampires have the ability to move things with their mind but all have the power to communicate with their minds. Minor vampires can only communicate with one another.”  Stated the professor. 10

They wrote together in sync as if programmed, every desk straight and in line and then there was Jessika. Streaked hair, lime green tank top and blue skirt that was so long it dragged like a bottom of a wedding dress. They all wear school uniforms but her then all their heads twisted around to stare. Their eyes cold and black just stared at her. And they seemed to whisper something but she didn’t quite catch it but then it started getting louder and louder until finally their voices rose together in chorus. 11

“YOU DON’T BELONG JESSIKA. YOU’LL NEVER BELONG. NEVER. HOW CAN YOU KILL YOUR OWN KIND! JESSIKA! JESSIKA!” 12

She shook her head and covered her ears, as she got up and ran. 13

A scream erupted from her as she awoke, her legs moving as if to mimic the dream run. A sob came from her, as she began to cry, she brought her legs to her chest and wrapped her arms around herself. There was a large bang and she jumped before knowledging Lanisa, her foster mother’s shouts and knocks on the door. 14

“Jessika, honey are you okay? Please open the door…JESSIKA!”15

She shook as she tried to calm herself down. Her things rattled a bit for second before she got control of herself and got up and went to the door, after making her face stone cold. She opened and there stood, her foster mother looking concerned. 16

“Jessika, are you alright?”17

“I’m fine, okay? I had a bad dream, is all and I would love it if you didn’t make a big deal out of it.”18

“I’m sorry I was worried, all the screaming. Like someone had lost hope…..”19

“I’m fine.”20

“Alright, if you are sure…”21

“I’m really sure.” 22

Her foster mother’s began to move away from the door and Jessika closed it. 23

“Freak.”24

“Witch.”25

Jessika didn’t acknowledge the stares and whispered comments as she walked down the buzzing hallway to her locker. Her long streaked black hair was in spiky pigtails and her black eyes were accented with heavy purple. Her shirt had a caused a stir with the teachers, and got her a trip to the principal. But they had worked out something; she would cover the “UC” in the “Fuck You” on her tank top. She was used to the comments by now, as a child, it bothered her but now she was used to be alone. Opening her locker, she got out an apple for lunch and began eating it, leaning on her locker. Her locker held a couple schoolbooks and “The Book of Night” which, Jessika inherited after her mother died when she was six. Ever since, she had been in and out of foster homes and learned to deal with the loneliness and rely on herself. She felt sort of sorry for her foster mother who was trying for hard to give her stability, and be a real mother to her but Jessika wasn’t having it. She had a mother once, and she knew………..She looked up and saw her apple was all eaten except the core, she moved over to the trash and threw it away. She turned to go back to her locker when someone bumped into her, knocking her on her ass and she slid across the floor because she was so light. 26

“Hey!”27

A boy with shaggy black hair walked over slowly, he was tall and almost seemed cold until he got close and she got to look in warm brown eyes. 28

“Sorry about that…”29

He offered her a hand.30

She was still looking at him. He was tan, built as if he ran and moved often but lean like a dancer. He wasn’t handsome really but very attractive and she felt something inside call to him and as she placed her small hand in his big one, she felt shivers go up down her spine. Her eyes held his as he pulled her up. 31

“Lex.” Said a voice and she looked up to see a group of kids. A boy had called out to the guy, who she guessed was Lex, who hadn’t turned around yet and was still looking at her. 32

“What’s your name?”33

“Jessika Ling.”  He repeated her name, making it sound like melting butter. 34

“Lex.” 35

They released each other’s hand and she felt a little colder because of it. 36

“I’ll see you again.” He said before joining the group and leaving. 37

“Ummmmmm.” She sat in her room with a list of vampires by power. At the top of the triangle was Lesvont, major vampire king and one of the old ones. She had yet to see him…a knock on her door, made her scramble to hide the list and went to answer it. 38

Lanisa stood there with a tray of a blueberry muffin and a glass of milk. They stood there a moment before Jessika opened the door a little wider inviting her in. She sat it down before she turned to Jessika, who in a solid colored tank top and shorts. Lanisa smiled a little at her attire. 39

“That has to be the most normal clothing I’ve seen you in.”40

Silence. 41

“Jessika, I just want to reach out to you but I don’t know how…”42

“You can’t.” 43

“Huh?”44

“Nothing, I just don’t want another mother. I’ve been through that….” 45

“Oh.” Lanisa said, obviously hurt as she headed through the door, stopped. 46

“ I just have one more thing.” 47

“Yeah?” 48

“If you ever feel you need to talk, just come to me, okay. “49

And then she left. Jessika looked at the closed door before turning back to her work and grabbed the muffin. 50

“She smells funny.” Announced Amber as they all roam the streets, that night after their first day at school. The twins, Mack and Larry were talking to Stacy. Landon and Katie were cuddling. Lex turned to Amber. 51

“How is that?” 52

“I dunno, just funny, like something isn’t quite right in her and the humans seemed to…stay away from her as if they sense something different.” 53

“I didn’t smell anything funny.” 54

Amber turned to him and rolled her pretty green eyes. 55

“Duh, your nose is far in her breast, you couldn’t smell anything right.”56

He growled at her and she smiled cheerfully back. 57

“What breast?” asked Landon as he walked beside them and then yelped, when Katie bit his shoulder. 58

“Hey you shouldn’t be worried about anyone’s breast but mine.” 59

“Oh, I do.” He announced as he pushed her up against a nearby tree and started to kiss her. 60

Amber and Lex rolled their eyes as the half moon was covered up by moving clouds. Then Lex stopped and everyone followed his action expect for Katie and Lan. 61

“Get over here. Now.” Hearing the urgency in his voice they joined quickly. 62

“Bro, what is….”? Started Mack before he started to growl. 63

“Vampires.” 64

“Stand down, and everyone start backing up.” 65

“But Lex-“66

“Don’t argue, we are in their territory.”67

Lex decided not arguing wouldn’t be enough to get the pack out, so he decided to turn. As they back up, the hair on his arms pricked up and began to grown longer as well on other parts of his body. The moving and growing of bones was evident under his paper-thin skin and he began to get bigger. His nose and face got narrower and more animal like as his eyes turned golden sliver color. He fell quickly to his hands and legs and howled as the change come over him, body and mind to a complete transformation. His instinct was to destroy and protect the pack at all cost. Even if that met giving up his own life. 68

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  • HeartlessAddiction
    June 17, 2005
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    That is a very good peice of work, thought the first paragraph kind of puts you off, since it shows how simply she can defeat these might undead, whereas people want to hear about challenging stories, make it harder, more fighsty and a little more slower, you rushed right into the first bit. But apart from that its a brilliant story, well done


  • sugs
    June 17, 2005
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    I am not used to reading stories but you made me read the whole page , so take it as a compliment

    your work is very Raphaelite, considerig the pains you take whlile describing things,its almost a visual for the reader and thats sign of a good work.

    keep working on it,after reading this much am sure it would turn out to be a great story.

    luv

  • hearttouchedfool
    June 16, 2005
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    thanks sooo much for your comment and i will keep them in mind yeah i want to develop mah characters more like especially Jessika who the fuck is she?????!!!! but it is moving so slow it is driving me out of mah mind but thanks for the advice this is mah first vampire/werewolve sorry and ANY advice would be great....THANKS AGAIN

  • Atalanta Born
    June 16, 2005
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    I like this a lot, except for the first bits of dialouge... It seems a bit unfinished but that would be because it is a chapter of a book rather than a whole book. I really hope that you continue this piece because I happen to like it a lot. I do think that the vampires should be more mystical in a sense... and that if you do have vampires, it would be better to establish the relationship of the characters in the first chapter and then introduce the vampires in the second or third chapters. It would make the plot stronger and better woven, to me at least.

    Lauren