http://hizuki24.deviantart.com/art/God-s-child-lineart-include-113108735
http://greenfeed.deviantart.com/art/Just-a-Dream-fullversion-138252211
She was dreaming in bed. It was a cold, dreary, rainy day. She loved rainy days but she was in bed sleeping on this day. In her dream she was lost. Running around town. But town was nothing she knew. The town she knew was long gone. She was running but was going no where. So she stopped on a doorstep of an old abandoned house. She started thinking deep dark thoughts that brought her into a trance. In that trance she started crying. Big sad tears. While crying those big sad tears in the real world she started screaming "Make it stop!!! No!!!" Her mom came in and woke her up. "Everything's ok it's alright. Nothing's going to hurt you." Well the girl was still asleep she started curling into a ball and felt like dying. She just sat there crying her life away. Once the girl stoped crying she was 30. Married. And had children. But this was just a dream. She woke up. Her mom was there comforting her in that little room.
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just a dream & God's child
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She was dreaming in bed. It was a cold, dreary, rainy day. She loved rainy days but she was in bed sleeping on this day. In her dream she was lost. Running around town. [[okay, those two sentences should be one. example: In her dream she was lost and running around town.)
But town was nothing she knew. [I am guessing you meant THE town was nothing she knew.)
The town she knew was long gone. She was running but was going no where. (no where should be one word.)
So she stopped on a doorstep of an old abandoned house. She started thinking deep dark thoughts that brought her into a trance. In that trance she started crying. Big sad tears. (once again these two sentences should be one, example: In that trance, she started crying big sad tears.)
While crying those big sad tears in the real world she started screaming "Make it stop!!! No!!!"
Her mom came in and woke her up. "Everything's ok it's alright. Nothing's going to hurt you." Well the girl was still asleep she started curling into a ball and felt like dying. (run-on sentence. example: Well, the girl was still asleep. She started curling into a ball and felt like dying.)
She just sat there crying her life away. Once the girl stoped crying she was 30. Married. And had children. (Stopped is spelled incorrectly; Once the girl stopped crying she was 30, and married, and also had children. This should be one sentence.)
But this was just a dream. She woke up. Her mom was there comforting her in that little room.
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having THAT said, this should be more detailed, I was thinking that you should possibly continue? -
Was this for a contest...? Or something? anyway i didn't really get it that much and what was the links in the preview?
well ok then haha
--kati
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Um, not quite what I am looking for. It would make a good rough outline, but not really a story. You either did not read the rules or chose to ignore them. It is under the minimum and you did not state whether you think frogs are cute in your AN's. I'm very sorry to say you are DQed, but feel free to enter another more elaborate story.
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