Emily part 2 (bulimia)

"Jake i;m not sure we should go" i said in sheepish voice that Jake knew ment something was up1

Jake had always been my favorite brother. Well he was my ahlf brother no one really knew. He was as greta as a guy could get. Still he had been living here for his whole life everyone knew him. He Was 16 and had made varsity freshmen year in high school he was the 2nd in the state. He's 6'6 brown hair with the bluest eyes. I admirre him. My favorite brother.2

"EMs" what he caleld me " WHy there's nothign wrong with them"3

he said as always convincing me4

"well the thing is that i don't think that Katina Girl Likes me" i said quiter than ever. I could tell he was struggling to shear me.5

"Ems she doesn't know you, no one even knows your my sisiter what do you except she thinks your competition. she hasn't had competition in like forever....." he said and kept on tlaking i just blocked him and listened to a song on my Ipod. 6

"hey loser did you hear me?"7

"no i didn't Jake. What?" i siad in a mean way8

"we have to be there like at 1:00 ok" he said. i knew htere was no way  ou of this.9

"yeah whatever" i said in a way that if it was any ohter day i knew he would have told mom.10

we got home fairly fast. i was living with his mom and dad. My real mom was away for when ever it didn't  matetr.11

"hey you guys hungry?' she asked i dreaded that question so bad12

"yeah" we said in unison13

so we ate and ate and i couldn't take it anymore i excused myself and  said i was going to the park before we left for the richardson's house.14

So I went to Wendie's and to their bathrrom and i threw up15

"this is the last time" i said to myself in a whisper.But i knew it wasn't 16

i went back home lie nothing happened and said i had forgotten something but it was time to leave.17

we left and me and jake said nothing on the wya there.18

we knocked and Todd came to get the door. Howi loved Todd but not in that way really i just admired him. PLus he and Jake had been best feriends sionce forever.19

I heard todd call out "kat come down hear we ahev company" i giggled cause it sounded so fake liek something my mom would say....20

i saw her coming down and just then i realized something was majorly wrong with her i just didn't know what it was.......21

Author notes

still a stupid story i used my name and a name of other epopel i know cause i cant hink of other names seriosuly

comments are really appreciated this is the xsame story as katina but through mily

i will change the names later

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  • ForgottenxMe
    July 3, 2005
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    its really good. you amke everythign work out sooner or later. well i like it im gonna read more, to get a better look at it
    ~nerny

  • falling curtain
    June 15, 2005
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    I think its a really good start, i cant wait to read me, and i hope that they both realise they've got similar disorders and become friends instead of rivals

  • EmsandAbs
    June 15, 2005
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    thakns i think i need to smake spell chack a habit

  • DarkJester
    June 15, 2005
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    Getting better through plot, but it seems that you struggle to communicate with the reader. Again, spellcheck is your friend, it fixes little typos like htese.

    Also, I noticed that if you can, try to separate her thoughts from her actions, this is a problem in some other stories i have read over many years. I'm not sure how you can do it, perhaps by sealing the thoughts or actions off with symbols, similar to enclosing dialouge with quotes. I usually use asterisks for the actions.

    Getting better. I await if there is going to be more to this.