Bloody Cinderella

CHAPTER 11

I laid there on top of my soot covered blankets with my eyes closed, trying to figure out what happened the night before. I remembered there was some kind of ball and my step sisters freaked out that I danced with the prince, Oh my gosh I danced with the prince, well what happen after that, I tried to clear my head, I got home around midnight like the fairy thing with the wand told me to. when I got home my step mother and my evil step sisters came at me at all sides saying how dare you and how could you do that to me…and then I just blacked out. 2

“That’s a relief” I told myself. I opened my eyes and looked down with a gasp of horror and screamed. There was blood all over my ragged clothes. “What did I do last night?” I jolted up from the floor like it shocked me. I took of my bloody clothes as quickly as I could and looked frantically around to try to figure out where I should put them. I decided that I was going to burn the clothes. I changed into my other set of rags and stood there for what seemed like days trying to figure out what I should do next. I was just thinking that I should probably go see if my step family was okay when one of the maids came running in crying fiercely.3

“Cinderella something terrible has happened,” I could hardly hear what she was saying through the sobs and hiccups that came from her. I ran over to her quickly, was it my doing that she was crying so hard.4

“What is it Bella, what happened?” I began to hug her. She herself had been having a hard time as of late. Her father made her leave her own prince that was rumored to be a beast deep within the woods. I think no one has ever seen him before, besides her of course; people like to make things up frequently saying how they saw him when in all actuality they had not. 5

She took a deep breath trying to control her sobs, “I was on my way to check and see how the mistresses were because they had not called upon us for some time, and when I got there it was the worst sight I had ever laid eyes upon, th…they,” stuttering she decided to stop took a breath and she shuddered a bit, “They were stabbed repeatedly and chopped up. It’s so bad Cinderella.” She started to sob harder.6

This is not good. I could not have done this to them. I mean how could I have. I don’t remember doing it at all and killing someone is one thing nobody forgets. “Oh Bella this is terrible, who could have done something like this.” It was of course evident that I hated them, but no one would have expected me.7

“Cinderella, I am sorry, but you do not suppose that it was you who had done it, I heard you guys argue last night and well it got pretty heated, we both know that you have a tendency of blacking out when your upset.” She looked at me with a very serious expression.8

“Bella, that’s what I’m scared of, because well I did black out…if it was I who killed them I will be hanged…what am I going to do, please help me Bella.” I fell to the floor and started crying. What a mess I got myself into this time. I have never really killed anyone before but now apparently I have and part of me likes it.9

She just stood in spot for a while, making no noise at all. Choosing her words carefully, she started to look at me with a gleam in her eyes, and with a chilling voice began to speak, “I will help you if you help me,” I knew what was coming next before it even came out of her mouth, “I want you to murder my father so I can be with my prince. Just figure it like this, if you got caught for just killing your step mother and your step sisters it would be the same punishment as if you killed one more measly person, If you do this I will bring you with me and let you stay with my prince and I, until everything dies down here, what we will do about this situation is make it somebody else’s problem. They will not entirely think it was you.” she started to smile a very creepy not right grin for one who has such a pretty face.10

If the devil was a woman would she look like this lady that stood before me. I thought I could trust her with my life. I thought everything was going to be alright, but oh I was so wrong. I was blind for a long time. 11

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okay so this is just chapter one but i was wondering what all of you writers think of it. Im very shy about my writing and this is the best way to ask someone what they think. So what do you think? any adivise? do you like it?

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  • Asonine
    March 11
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    ooh, u dirty bastard you, I loved it mate, bravo


  • Tricia3 gold member
    March 8

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    I think you have a very interesting idea

    This is quite a different Cinderella story.You say this is Chapter 1. Is it to be a novel? or a longer story. It is a very unusual story, and can be turned into something very interesting. I think you have a very good writing style and don't be afraid to ask others what they think. That's the way we all learn.
    This is my first contest and there are just too many good stories.
    Thank you for entering your story and good luck.
    Trish