Chapter I – I Carceres1
He had come to the boarding school only because of his new foster family, if they could be called that. They had wanted to adopt only to improve their image and now he was 17 they didn’t want a teenager languishing about the pristine house. Mr. and Mrs. Seed had not been completely inhumane they had sent him to a very well renowned boarding school. St. Benedicts was one of the top in the country and there were some very prestigious schools competing against it in the rankings, the only thing teachers seem to care about these days.2
The first day at the school had been pretty uneventful he arrived in the Seed’s chauffeured car and met the headmaster, a kind yet ageing man by the name of Professor Sandhall, Ethan spoke with him about the subjects he would be taking and finalised his schedule for the coming year. The professor also assigned Ethan a tutor to help him up his mediocre grades to what the school would accept as standard. The headmaster proceeded to lead Ethan to his dormitory, which he shared with three other boys from the school. The room consisted of four single beds with heavy black shrouds on each side, apart from the beds the rest of the room was fairly simple, a single window at the far end and a bathroom. After settling himself into the new surroundings that would be “home” for the next year and unpacking all of his things, including his most prized possession his guitar, he heard the bell for lunch. 3
After checking his schedule he headed off in the direction of the dining hall, or at least he would have if he knew where it was. After what seemed like hours of aimlessly walking down corridors that all looked the same, he came across another student. A very pretty brunette girl of about 5ft 4”, she had the most amazing green eyes he mused as he approached her.4
“Excuse me.” He said in his smooth silky tones, the girl stopped and answered with the sweetest voice he had ever heard5
“Yes?” if he didn’t get this done with quickly he would be on his knees drooling.6
“I feel a bit stupid but, can you direct me to the dining hall, I haven’t got a fucking clue where I’m going.” He smiled at the slight shock that ran across her features, causing her to flush a sweet shade of rose pink.7
Once over the initial shock of a complete stranger walking up to her and swearing in general conversation, not something she was accustomed to, Samantha Valentine recomposed herself and answered the handsome, blond standing before her, “Sure,” she replied in a bubbly tone, “I was just on my way there, where did you come from?”8
“Out of town.” Ethan replied his tone turning monosyllabic. Samantha laughed.9
“No, no. I mean where did you come from in the school?” it was Ethan’s turn to flush.10
Author notes
Well this is the first chapter this i think (for those of you who have read the whole thing) is going to be on a par with Raes story so expect many chapters and for this to be ongoing for a long time!
Enjoy the 1st chapter
Rae
What did you think? Please comment!
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Awww cute! Keep this up! Am addicted already!!
One love,
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kool im glad its no where near like as good as yours but i havent written in a while lol im glad you like
HNB
Rae V -
This sounds fab so far. I love this story. I'm hooked to it all ready. It's wonderful.
HNB
Always and Forever,
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Thanx for the comment, im just having issues with MS word at the moment. and im glad its better than the others (they were written atleast a year ago) and hopefully i will get the character progression in ther thanx again!
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Hey babes great start! I cant wait for more lots of love n kisses Your daughter xxxx
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Well, a great start. I really like this. It is showing a style definately different than your other stories (the ones I have read). A few punctuation errors are about all I found. And as far as the spell check, leave it where you want it. I personally use the UK version for my writing, as my style is much more formal and stiff. The US is fine if you are going for more casual conversation.
As for the bunny word, leave it in. Or you may change it to something a tad less shocking, but if you are going to show growth and maturity in your character as you go along, you have to start at the bottom. This is very good, so far, and has great potential. Keep it up. Thank you for sharing. -
lol, you've got a fan big bro. nice one. good start, lets see how the rest of the story goes. hows Rae going huh? anyway, swearings fine, i do it all the time and no-one complains! and spelling, doesnt bother me!!! l8az love ur lil sis sky xxxxx
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Hello Rae. Very nice write. Keep up the good work, and don't ever stop writing. Looking forward to more, BM xxx
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Wow*blushes* thnx!! im glad you like it!
Lol yeh i know i shuda been sleepin at 3 in the mornin but i couldent help it, i had an idea and it ran away with me and then i finished the part so i figured i may as well post it, and i had a good lie in so lodsa sleep lol
thnx Junai
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HUn this is a great story. YOu have such a wonderful broad imagination.
YOu always blow me away one write after the next.YOu are a brilliant Rae.
This was so sweet and Captures how it really is to be in this kind of situation.This played out beautifully. And I love that he cussed in their first conversation and she was shoked
It brings on that she is..... Inoccent,In sorts..Well this was just a wonderful read. But when did you post it? You were soppost to be sleeping hun.
Janai
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I dunno if the swearin works but it was kinda supposed to "break the ice" with a sledge hammer. Wht u think cz im not sure it works..
glad you like it
Rae -
Sorry i friki hate word, ill edit it today. sorry bout that i hate errors, glad you like it
Rae -
Not really anyone at the moment, but they might be. And sorry ill go edit that now!!
Rae -
Thanx and there will b more
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very gud as usual!!! how rtude 2 swear in a 1st meetin!!!!lol, ach well!!!! keep up da gud work, cant w8 2 read mre! xxx
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Why did i mentally picture them having that conversation on the second floor maths corridor just before you can turn off to go down to catering.....??
Was just about to correct your spelling of 'blond'..and then realised you can spell it with or without an 'e'....now i feel stupid
Anyways...great write, i hope we gets lots more of this ^^
ShOrTaSs
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hey i like it, one criticism, you need to change your spell checker to the english version, lol 'finalized' is with an 's', not a 'z', but anyway, excellent write, I can picture the scenes, very good, look forward to the rest.
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that's cool, are they based on anyone in particular cause I can see people in them....just one thing shouldn't benedicts have a capital B?! anyways great write can't wait to read more
xxx
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cute can't wait to read more...
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