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My Choice2
If I could become anything that I might3
Such as two loving arms that would rock you all night4
Or eyes that could see past your fear to your need5
A love that could grow once I planted the seed6
A tree to give shade when you stroll ’neath the sun7
Understanding and strength to help two become one8
A cloud to bring rain like a kiss on your lips9
A song while you dance through the swirls and the dips10
A home to be safe when you failed what you dared11
A mirror to see that you tried, that you cared12
A lesson you learned with a smile in your eyes13
Laughter that healed and broke through your disguise14
But it’s hard to decide what my best choice might be15
While I’m on the inside and I can’t really see16
So for once I’ll be wise and I know I can’t lose17
Since I love you so much that I’ll just let you choose 18
Author notes
No grandiose statement.....just how I feel
What did you think? Please comment!
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Once eyes have been opened, they are not always all that easy to close.....
You have written here a brilliant piece of poetry.....it sweeps the reader romantically across the page, taking breath, and leaving a feeling of falling fast - like when you drop suddenly in an elevator.
So very well done!
Love & Blessings,
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~ Janet ~ ~
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wow dad, i really like this poem i read it over and over atleast 5 times.lol.and that picture of the sunset is just SOOO beautiful.dont u wish u could see a sunset like that in person.i really do!and if tehre are really ones like that, im bound and determined to see one eventually.well as i always say dad, great write yet again.another one of your wonderful love poems.love ya lots dad!!!
<3 ur baby girl -
no guarantees Rose but this worked for me:
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Glad you enjoyed the new poem!
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Hmmmm...sounds to me like the lady is a very lucky one, dear. Sorry it's been so hectic since the move, but I am glad I chanced across this piece as it has much to give one thought about. Highly inspirational and filled with great emotion. Outstanding job. By the way, send me the link again to your book, as it seems to be off your homepage now.
rose
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You have such talent my friend and when I visit your page I am rarely disappointed. I must admit though, I've missed this side of your writing. This is the Dan who oozes romance and love from his very special soul.
Very enjoyable piece... definitely makes me sigh.
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I'd be a book to write down your dreams
to vent, create or perfect all your schemes
A kiss to remind you how lovely you are
or a road to bring you back from afar...
What a wonderful (and inspiring) poem this is! Not a superfluous word here. It's beautifully written, intelligent, and ever so sweet. A treat!
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Powerful poem written from a loving person, very intense and deep
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the flow on this was perfection... not a stumble or a missed beat! what a pleasure to read rhyme and not trip or get lost somewhere
beautiful sentiment too
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every thing and more
great! im a true romantic and that was .. great.. im almost speechless. it reminds me of some type of wedding vow something profoundly loving that when you read it you almost cry for the subject that you can imagine the writer is envisoning. -
this was so wonderful!
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No grandiose statment - just how you feel? Well, I must say that with words like this flowing from your pen, I certainly wouldn't mind being the object of your attentions. This has got to be one of the most loving and tender poems I have ever read from the hand of a man. I will have to come back and check out more of your poetry. If this is any indication of how you write, I can see myself getting lost in your words.
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I will be sure to watch for that event LOL. And yes some do seem to run like hell from it once they find it.
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Reallly loved this
Dan, this was beautiful!! I reallly loved this. I know. I say that about all of your poems since you are my favorite poet in the whole wide world, but this one was exceptional! I loved the ending, it was so romantic. This is one of my favorites. Love Ya, Deb -
Daniel, this is so full of tenderness and is just beautiful. Hell, it even made me want to swoon and fall into your arms
Not an easy feat to accomplish LOL Again, you write and impress me deeply. Wonderful piece! Hugs, Gypsy
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aw that was beautiful! I'm not a big fan of love poems because they're usually to gushy. This was sincere and serene. I liked it a lot
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Congrates!
Congrates on your win too bro,
I thought it was well earned!
You have the heart that deserves many treasures in my book!
Laters bro.
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Beautiful Beyond Words Is Your Heart!
I for one, enjoy your soul so free
But feel the tide within your words
As waves of needing crash sea to sea
You still soar high above all love birds
You live the life that shows you care
I have seen the truth within your eyes
And I'm pleased to call you a friend sincere
Who pens his love from deep inside
Thanks for all the beauty you tenderly share
I hope you see how much your words mean
As you write the words that show you care
Your heart is heard and seen.
Thanks for all you do, by just being you!
Love ya bro, keep the pen to paper
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Yes Del, I am undeniably a hopeless romantic (in more than one sense of the term). But I'm sure you have noticed by now that while we are busy writing out our feelings to those we love, the bad boys are busy bedding them! hmmmm.....so the pen MAY be mightier than the sword, but the swashbucklers seem to get a lot more sheath time.
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romantic-soul, I'm sure a lot of us DO spend a lifetime looking for our soulmate....and then a few run like hell once they find them! I hear runaway bride is going to be an event in the Olympics next time around.
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Thank you ShiningStar. Most of my work is love poetry....I seem to get stuck in a rut. Even the very first poem I ever wrote was a love poem (a punishment from a teacher for chewing gum in class).
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Thanks Joan. When you have a good subject, the words are easy.
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Thanks for the nice comment lilpoemwriter. To be honest, I'm not sure if it comes with XP. I'm still using 2000 pro on most of my machines.
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beauty flows from your words with such easi. .... wow.
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Very beautiful love poem. Whoever the girl is she's very lucky.
You words have a certain beauty about them, maybe its the flow. Anyways, I wish you the best of luck in this contest.
~Angel
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Hello Dan,
Ahhh! another hopeless romantic....we are indeed, a dying breed I daresay, but I am glad there are a few of us left, else we may never know the swoon of the ladies for whom we devote our songs. Excellent write with an awesome flow an rhythmn to it. One of the most enjoyable poems I have read lately. I doubt there is anything a woman admires more in a man than his ability to recognize her intelligence and ability to make choices. Well done, sir.
Cheers and best wishes,
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This indeed is a very charming poem. I think my faviorite line was:
A love that could grow once I planted the seed
That was beautiful and the ending just pulled it all together.
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Georgeous poem,,,I think whoever it is written for is a very special and lucky person. This was fabulous.
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Very fantastic...Very beautiful...And heartfelt..Nice job!!!You did very well at the rhyming and it is well worded...Nice job!!!
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What a great piece. I love the flow of this and the romance, ahhhhh yes it is very romantic. Anyone would love to have these words for and about them , isn't what most of us are looking for in life...our soul mate.
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Dear Dan, This my Friend is absolutely magnificent, it's good to see such a wonderfl love poem once again written by you.
This poem has so much love and longing in it, I love the way you have ended it, to let the one you love choose ~ brilliant, and I love the picture you have chosen for it
Love to you Dan.
Joan
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ok i really like the poem it is a great write and the picture goes well with the poem great job and good luck in the contest
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Awesome!
Very soothing, loving, comforting words. I can imagine this as a marriage proposal. I really enjoy the way you show how an object can fascilitate your expression of love. I haven't read your other writings yet but you show a very sensual side here that is very impressive. Looking forward to reading more of your work. -
Great job!!
This is absolutely beautiful. Excellent rhyming and flow with this piece.
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i love the pik, its on all our comps, nice that it finally comes in use! This was simply gorgeous! beautiful. the ending was so romantic and *sigh* dreamy, haha. way to go. later -Alea-
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i realy really really like this write...alot i like the picture doesnt it come standard with all windows XP software? lol well i had to ask. well good write and keep up the good work. -lilpoem-
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Hey Mia! Don't you just love it when the ending works out? A great piece that fizzles in the final stanza is still a piece you forget 30 seconds after reading it. I'm always VERY pleased when a nice ending comes to me.
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This is so incredibly beautiful Dan. It's been quite a while since I have read such romantic, loving words from your pen. This would woo even the coldest and hardest heart. This flows so so smoothly from line to line and the thoughts behind the words are something that every woman, and man as well, would give up their greatest possessions to hear and have another feel towards them, in all earnest and sincerity and without condition or exception. I just love this.
♥ Kimberly
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Thanks QB. I was blessed with a nice visit from my muse for this one.
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This was so, so gorgeous. Especially how you ended it. I love all the examples of things you said you could become for her. Most pretty thing I've read in a while Great job.
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very nice gentleness here. humble and unselfish.
very well done
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