My First Love Poem

I reached Ansal's Plaza well ahead of time and seated myself in the Mc Donald's which is stationed in one corner of the mall.I was not interested in giving company to the love struck couples cozying in the amphitheatre of the mall.1

I didn't bother to call Tina to enquire about her whereabouts as I was sure that she will not manage to come on time.She had a habit of making people wait for long hours.Tina would then apologise with an expression that made even the most resilient soul forgive her. 2

I wish she could get over this habit of hers but alas,this woman never showed any signs of improvement.I could imagine her fiance's dilemma and I could sympathize with him.3

I ordered a Paneer salsa wrap and cold coffee and went up to one of the corner tables in the restaurant. Cold coffee was my perfect idea of a beverage even in winters. 4

My taste in food was uncommon and atypical. I loved to experiment with my food. That is how I am,I think uncanny and rather mysterious. I preferred my food without onions and maybe that is why I was making an effort to dig deep into the wrap and remove the humongous piece of onion that was giving me an unsettling feeling in the stomach.5


It was disturbing me but deep inside there was this beautiful unspoken feeling blooming inside me like the young flowering buds of the springitide.Was it love? It was too early to reach to conclusions.6

I suddenly felt this urge to write something. And this something pointed towards you and this comely feeling that was enwrapping my mind. I wanted to weave my feelings into words entwined with love and tenderness.7

I searched helplessly for a piece of paper. I had a habit of always carrying a pen with me but I was sure I would never be lucky with the writing material I was searching for.8

My eyes fell on the tissue papers lying near my food. One of them was annoyingly stained orangish red.I decided to use it as my wiping material.After wiping my hands off the ketchup I decided to settle for the other two tissue papers and use them as my writing material.9

I started off with three lines and tried to give it the formation and body of a poem.10

I had heard of Haiku which is a Japanese form of poetry written in 17 words comprising of 5,7,5 syllables arranged in three lines. It is written about nature and seasons.11

And thus my first Haiku love poem was born. It spoke of the graceful and elegant flower that was blooming in wishfulness.Perhaps I was feeling like a flower enwrapped in ineffable feelings of tenderness and love.12

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bloomed in gorgeousness16

petals blushing resplendent17

yearns to see lover18

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  • Kyndal Laran
    April 21
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    thats interesting.


  • citcat
    March 8

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    Tina would thenapologise with an expression that made even the most resilient soul forgive her. (you forgot the space between then apologise)

    I wanted to be left alone in a room with four huge walls where in I could think about you and you only,with no one to indulge in an unnecessary intrusion.4 (is that meant to say WHEN in of something else, because at the moment it does not make total sence or it might just not make sence to me)

    It was disturbing me but deep inside there was this beautiful unspoken feeling blooming inside me like the young flowering buds of the springitide.Was it love? It was too early to reach to conclusions.5 (i like that paragraph alot )


    Other then those few mistakes it was written really well and i really enjoyed it. Your description was wonderful in it. Well done and keep up the great work!


  • Muhammad Rafay
    February 26

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    Nice Story... I liked your story.....and Good luck for the Contest I hope your story win...................

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 1, characters: 5.