Missing

We had been soul mates, 1

friends, 2

enemies, 3

companions.4

You and I were travelers, venturing up those sandy white dunes, grey society kissing our tender heels.5

For so long, our brows remained unfurled and the weight of the world could not catch our shoulders.6

Our spirits were joint, not like peanut butter and jelly. Rather, we were pen and ink, sending messages through the sweet summer air that you loved.7

But by then our days together were numbered, you and I, and one day I would soon awaken to find that you had withdrawn to an eternity empty of imagination.8

That time came much too soon.9

A year passed by us both before I stopped tugging on your once loose sleeve.10

I wish I had never stopped trying.11

But I did, and I could no longer chase you with snakes and frogs. 12

You left me with a loneliness that luckily lessened with time, time that I saw etched into your face like the stories we used to write with our footsteps.13

I was thrust into a world that I was not yet ready for, surrounded by others like me, but you always had gone for the easier path. You followed people like you.14

You settled into a further nest and I watched you with listless eyes as the greyness swallowed you up in the absence of the scent of home. You were not ready.15

Jelly remains jelly without peanut butter, though it lacks diversity.16

You weren’t the same as you were not so long ago and I surely wasn’t the me I used to be; we were, and still are, unlike peanut butter and jelly.17

I couldn’t consider, mourn, or replace you… 18

only know that a friend was missing from me.19

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  • DanceTheNightAway
    July 9

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    Wow. This is very pretty. I hope this is JUST a poem and you haven't actually endured these feelings. Very good job!

  • Brian Balzer
    March 2
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    Nice

    I like the way you described the journey that you both took and how you explained that each of you took your own path. I liked many of your wording choices. I like the mixture of deep thought and light humor. I found the comparison of your companionship to peanut butter and jelly interesting. This conveyed to me a tone of sadness as I'm sure it was intended too. Good job.


  • Elect The Dead
    February 25

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    First of all, thank you for the comments on my stories, they were helpful.
    Second of all, I like this
    It creates sort of an allusion, and imagery for the reader.


  • Starlight-Kisses
    February 24

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    aww this was a really great poem well done

    Me: This was really great I liked it

    Joshua: no u didn't your just saying that

    Me: LIAR u didn't like it u are such a a....boy

    Joshua: so what I didn't lie....or maybe I did


  • Keirii
    February 24

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    I really liked this poem.

    The only thing is that it makes me more hungary than interested.
    I kept thinking of "Got Milk" commercials with me on the couch
    choking down a pb&j sandwich

    But without all that this is truly an amazing poem.
    It's much different than all the others and I have to say you worded it very well.

    Especially these lines:


    You and I were travelers, venturing up those sandy white dunes, grey society kissing our tender heels.5

    For so long, our brows remained unfurled and the weight of the world could not catch our shoulders.6

    Very beautifully done.

    I'll consider this poem carefully and keep an eye on it.
    It really was well done

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