Anything Else

I would be camoflauge- and hide from the world- 1

or a reclusive thing, living in shadows2

I would be anything other than what I am now-3

I would be stronger4

faster better5

I would be fire and consume all that hindered me6

Or the ocean tide, and crash into land, tripping beach bums,7

I would be free,8

Careless,9

And life would be10

Anything else11

I would be more than a two bit college dropout 12

With debt and growing,13

Dirty fingernails from hard work, but nothing to show but a fender bender14

I would be a set of wings and carry some other poor schmuck 15

Who is in my shoes,16

because I would love for that to happen to me17

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  • InvisibleMan silver member
    June 12, 2005
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    For some reason, this piece makes me look back on my life. There were years without friends or people who cared, times when even I didn't care about me. So many solitary roads and burdens unshared. And yet, I like who I am...I'm proud of who I am and what I stand for. And I realize, that I would not be what I am now, if I had not been what I was back then.

    A piece that speaks to me quite loudly....a job well done.

  • Touchof1der
    June 10, 2005
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    It works just fine and no I did not think it too depressing. I think it's sad to feel such things but the desire to be free, be strong and be better than the person you feel you are today is such a natural feeling that we all have. To NOT have such feelings would be unnatural. I'm certainly not perfect and yes, I too have certain things I wish I was or could be. This is a perfect fit for this contest. Thank you for entering and good luck!
    ♥ Kimberly

  • raedae16
    June 10, 2005
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    Great

    Wow that was great i enjoyed this one. um... short but a very strong impact on me. great job... keep writting!!! Have a great day!!!

  • Reset Button
    June 10, 2005
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    You are a set of wings to those who look towards you for comfort. Don't trod an uneasy path. Don't drown yourself in pity. It will make matters worse. My friend, I have learned many life lessons the hard way because I am stubborn and full of grudges. Do not do what I have done. It's not fun. I do not regret what I have done but that doesn't mean someone else in my position wouldn't. I am always here for you and if that's not enough there is always Cara. There's always something to thank the Lord for. Prehaps you needed to be humbled. lol Lord knows I need to be humbled every second I breathe. Love the writes deary. I do so love the ones when the emotions are high and there's nothing to stop the muse from spilling them all out on paper.

    ~Yink
    Edited on Jun 10, 9:53 because 'spelling!! I HATE IT WITH AN UTMOST PASSION! '.