Song of Emotions

“Walking in the rain
Waiting for you…”
Arashi sang while her fingers flitted over the guitar strings. My first concert, she thought, I must make it the best!
“Hoping to stay with you
Forever…”
Tears started flowing down her cheeks, streaking them, leaving a path behind, but still, she carried on; the tears, though uncontrollable, unhindered her singing and playing. Note after note sounded from her guitar, word after word she sang. Fans shouted and sang along with her, one of the few female Visual Rock singers, new but popular, and strong.
“Wishing I’ll be here
To never leave, not so soon”
A sudden short pause. But still she continued, using another string as a substitute. Gasps from the crowd changed into a loud cheer, cheering for Arashi’s perseverance. She was playing as well as before, despite the great difficulty; the audience applauded her.1

Music pulsed through the concert hall as Arashi smiled ecstatically. She surveyed her handiwork: crazy fans singing and dancing along with the music she produced. She, Arashi, could become as popular as X-Japan, or ever more so! Maybe the title of “Queen of Visual Rock” would be “bestowed” upon her by fans!
“It’s not my choice
Not my choice at all”
Streaming down her face, tears traced the dried path down her cheeks. Tears sprang up from her eyes, falling, dripping onto her guitar.
“I don’t want this
Why me?
Why me!
Never wanted this!”
Her face paled as her heart beat faster, but her voice held strong, singing the melody, fingers strumming the harmony. Faces blurred before her; she was feeling a little dizzy. No, I will not faint, she promised herself fiercely. This may be my first and last concert!
“Waiting for you in the rain,
Walking alone…
It’s not my choice
To leave so soon.
I wanna live forever
Stay strong with you!”
The last lyrics of the song rang in the hall, running up to a climax. Arashi played the final chord, the sound resonating and the crowd went wild.
Everyone was screaming her name, “Arashi! Arashi! Arashi! We love you!”
Feeling giddy with excitement and happiness, she cried out to them, “Thank you! Thank you everyone!”
But the fans were not satisfied; they wanted more, more wonderful songs from their beloved singer.
“Encore! Encore! Encore!” The shouts erupted, carried on by others and soon, the entire hall of fans wanted Arashi to blast them away with another song of hers.2

Arashi sincerely wanted to sing more, however, she was afraid her body could not take it anymore. Summoning up her strength, she held the microphone near her mouth to speak, but no sound came out. She turned to her next alternative: music
Her emotions formed the notes of the song, a song without lyrics. Fans were surprised and confused but slowly, they sensed Arashi’s emotions. Pain, longing, hope, sadness, love, happiness, anger… all were present in the notes she played. But there was one they could not name. It was like bitter-sweet longing, or want for better and worse, whatever it was, it was a powerful emotion. Tears glistened on everyone’s cheeks, streaming down. They wiped them away with surprise and wondered why they had fallen.
The singer cried most of all, though her playing never showed it. At the last chord, as if a spell had been broken, the crowd started and looked at one another in confusion.
Arashi smiled, then left the stage quietly amid the commotion, and collapsed.

Author notes

Supposed to be a group effort of 4 people, but mostly written by me. Ideas were contributed and mixed around so this is the result. It's actually written from a picture prompt, a picture of a visual rock guitarist, according to my friend who provided the pic. Homework, duh, but ok by my standards, I think. My teacher wanted only 1 page but this is 2... heehee. By the way, the lyrics were written by me and no, there's no melody to them. It's just to convey the feelings of Arashi(:

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  • owlbookdreams
    October 12

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    Not bad

    I think that you have a few run-on sentences that I might proof-read and cut into shorter ones.
    Overall, I think you captured the emotions and the feelings well. I also really like the name Arashi. It's really pretty.


  • Lady Pixie Greeters member
    August 16

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    To answer your question:

    I did find some grammatical and punctuation things off in this, but overall- not much wrong with this.
    It had a lot of emotion and was a great scene constructed of a singer experiencing their first concert.
    Thank you for entering this in the contest!


  • Le Masquerade silver member
    July 2

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    This was very nice and I enjoyed reading it. I liked how you made the singer cry and let out all of her emotions through her music. Wonderful work and thanx for entering my competition!


  • SCREAMxTOxxBExHEARD
    June 10
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    This is very good. I would love to read more.
    Good luck in my contest ^^


  • Carina.J.LR
    May 13
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    I liked this, lots of emotions are shown, I would like to read more. >smiles<

    Thanks for entering and goodluck!

    -Carina


  • May Kingston
    May 6

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    This is well-written and is a very melancholy story, but it would have been better if there was more to Arashi's background. And it was a little confusing how she was excited at first about the prospect of becoming so famous, but then she says that it will be her "first and last concert." Still, nice story. Thanks for entering the contest.


  • Luci Ferraris
    May 1

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    The story doesn't exactly tell what was the reason for her sadness. Only when you read the lyrics of the song you see it has something to do with a lost love.
    It touched me, it almost made me cry.
    Great writing.

    beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 4, ending: 4, dialog: 4, characters: 4.


  • Drake Drakenheart
    February 22

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    Was this based off a real life event? It sure has the emotion of a true story. I see that it was written off a picture prompt. If it was based purely off of that, it is a pretty impressive piece of work.

    Nice lyrics too. As a fellow lyricist, I know there is much to be appreciated in heartfelt lyrics.


    • Emelite
      March 19
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      its not a real life event but im happy that i make it seem real enough(: and the lyrics were truly randomly thought up to put her emotions in them

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