Once I realize what I need to do, I step out onto the bridge stretching over route 2. I stare down, watching car after car zoom out from under me. I think of what I'd miss, who I'd miss. 1
My dogs.....my friends... 2
I shake my head, as if to help me forget the inevitable. As if it would help me concentrate on what I have to do. 3
As I continue on, towards the center of the bridge, fear starts to overtake my body. I turn around, my back against the oncoming traffic, and curl up into a ball on the side of the road. 4
After about 5 minutes I decide that its time. 5
I stand up, wipe the tears off my face, turn around to face the traffic and take a deep breath in. I move my hand to feel the note in my pocket, and I realize that although it sounds just like what Bella said, the little piece of paper suddenly feels like an 100 ton weight. I hope that someone, eventually, will read this note, after all, I have a lot to say. I climb up the side of the wall and stare at the cars below. 6
I remember exactly what I wrote:
"I loved him, more than I ever had loved anybody else, and then she snatched him up, mercilessly. And if I couldn't have him, life wasn't worth living."7
And in a burst of bravery, I jump. 8
(inspired by comatose by skillet)
Author notes
hmm...
well this was supposed to be deep and meaningful. when i thought it up in my head, it sounded really good..... it doesn't really sound good at all though. :/ lol. tell me what you think.
is it bad??
Comments
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KATHRYN! It twas very very good. I really liked it. It was so full of detail and was just awesome!!
*KT*


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Thanks good write though
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uhhh.. thanks for what??
o nvm, i get it. ok so this one is a TOTAL exaggeration of how stuff really is. i don't feel this strongly, so its all cool.
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Nice
Actually I have to disagree with you, Lucky. I think this story is quite intriguing. Despite its shortness, you did not skip on detail. Although I would like to read a little further into it, maybe if you would've added something more about what caused her to jump. Over all this story has a very powerful atmosphere about it so I really enjoyed reading it.

beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, characters: 3.
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thanks. its nice to know that it didn't suck.
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