The morgue was cold on the evening of December 17th. John Manner had been working there for twelve long years. His co-worker, Matt Adams, had only been employed there for three months. They were the guys in charge of moving bodies from point A to point B. It was a horrible, smelly job but it paid well.1
On this particular evening, both John and Matt were working from 9 PM-8 AM. They both sat inside the break room, bored. John sat in the corner with his feet up reading a Stephen King novel, while Matt sat at the table, drinking a coke, and playing solitaire. The room was silent until the clock struck midnight.2
An alarm went off that reminded Matt of the dismissal bell in his school. He was shocked too, because he had not heard the alarm before.3
John put down the novel and stood up.4
“Let’s go.” John said as he grabbed his big winter coat and walked out of the door.5
“Where are we going?” Matt said as he too grabbed his coat and ran out the door after John.6
“Were transporting bodies, Matt.”7
“At midnight?”8
“Yup.” 9
“Who are we moving?”10
“All the John Does.”11
“All of em’?” Matt asked12
“Yup.” John replied.13
Matt then helped John load six bodies into the back of the company hearse. They got in and took off.14
They had been driving for over an hour and Matt was becoming confused. He did not know where they were. Everything was white due to a recent ten-inch snowfall.15
“Where are we?” Matt asked16
“Don’t worry. Were almost there.” John replied.17
About fifteen minutes later they arrived at a small parking lot that was at the top of a big hill. Matt got out and saw at least ten other hearses parked in the same lot. He walked slowly to the edge of the hill and was petrified. 18
People were riding bodies down the hill as if they were sleds! John walked up behind him carrying one of the John does.19
“It’s Body Boarding!” John said. “Grab one and go have some fun!” Then he ran towards the hill, laughing.20
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Pefectly Sick
This is exactly the kind of sick twist at the end that I've come to expect of you. -
You are hilarious!!!!!! I definately had no idea where you were going with this. You definately have an amazing (though somewhat sick hahaha) sense of humor. I am speechless!!! (and that never happens lmao) I look forward to more stories from you in the future.
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EXCEPTIONAL
It's amazing! Messed up and quit weird I soooo have to admit, but excellent! I've now read all of your stories! Amazing how you write! I love them!!!!!!! Messege me with your techniques.
Thanks.
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beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Very good
You made me laugh. I haven't figured out how to put those little smiley faces on here, but if I could I would. Great stuff, keep at it.
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Well, that was definitely an...unexpected turn! I quite enjoyed it, though; you have an amusingly grim sense of humor =) Noticed a few typos, but I believe Valkyrie already pointed the lot of them out, so no worries =) I'm still going back and forth between O.o and
with the ending - but in a good way, haha. Really took me by surprise =) Nice work.
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*alternates between shock and laughter* Wow, now that's dark humor if I've ever heard it! Humor nonetheless, though. By the way, body boarding doesn't need to be capitalized.
Anyways, I love your details - the solitair and novels and everything. Those kind of details make a story rich - keep using them. 
Best of luck with all of your writing, and I hope you continue to have fun with it.
Welcome to Storywrite!
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Gosh, I don't think I'll ever get over this piece! It's so...weird...so...very...unusual. Unique, surely, but...gosh.
Par 7: We're [instead of Were]
Par 19: John Does [instead of does]
I don't know what I would suggest to really, really improve this because it seems that leaving the characters with names and jobs is enough.
This was just...
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