The Work

There once was a time, a time long since past, yet still, a time that once was. It was a time when hate did not cause man’s heart to wax cold. It was a time when man knew no death, and he did not know the pain of flesh gone ill. In truth, man did not know these things, for he could not know them. He could not know of that which was not to be found in the earth.1

The age was that in which God and man stood hand in hand. They would walk side by side so deep in love that they would seem to be one. It was such a deep love, so true, so pure that it would seem that none could come in its way.2

But there was one who could, and he was the one so bent of heart that he would. He was the cold heart of pride in flesh and blood. He was the dark one whose name was Snake.3

He bore down on Man and his Eve with the bait of sin. And blind to his tricks wrapped in the dark, they let him in. Once in, he broke their heart and soul with a ruse to please the flesh and feed their pride. He pried them from the hand of God and left them in a place they had not yet been. It was a place with no love, an earth now wrought with the curse of him, the Snake!4

In this dark cold earth, Man and his Eve did not know what to do, and at the voice of God they ran to hide. Their one true love now lost, and their walks cut off by a rift. Their hearts now dead, their minds now dark, and their flesh now sick, Man and his Eve were left with no hope.5

But God was not done with His one true love.6

He did not give up on them then. He set out on one more plan. He set out to get Man and his Eve back into his hand of love. He set out to join once more with them in His love and hold them in His arms. He wrought a plan. A plan now penned in His Word to be read. It was a plan of high love.7

It was The Plan of the life and death of His one Son. To step from the place of God to the place of man. To live to die. To once more have the heart of man and to hold him in His hand.8

A high price to pay for the heart and soul of man. To be bought with the blood of the One Son. Yet it is a price that was paid for you and for me. And it is a price that we could not hope to earn, but it is a free gift from God. It is given to show your worth. Not the worth you make in self, but the worth of you held in His Eye.9

This is the Grace of God, the one way to live from age to age, free from the death of sin. This is a true tale told by me to you. The tale of God and man once more to walk hand in hand.10

Author notes

Ok... So i lvve the person who made this contest... This is possibly the most fun i have ever had writing something!!!
The contest was to write a story using only 1 syllable words...
Obviously this is not my own original idea.. but it is a creative re-telling of the redemptive work of God...

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  • angellove silver member
    March 7

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    Excellent!

    Brilliant retelling the greatest story ever told.

    There is only one 2-syllable word: given. Easy fix would be to say that He gave it (or Him) to show your worth.

    God bless you.

    Beth

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, characters: 5.


  • Myryca
    February 16

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    I picked up "evil" in paragraph 3 but that was all (though I'm not very good at spotting multi-syllable words).

    I enjoyed reading this. I think you added a more interesting and creative touch to the old story of Genesis with your style. It flowed really well and you worded things in such a way that it reached out and touched my own faith.

    So thanks!

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 4, ending: 5.

  • slashinguk
    February 16

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    Same pitfalls as me

    There are a few multi-syllable words in there:

    Power
    Walking
    Again
    Given

    Also, in paragraph 4, you use "if" where I think you meant "of"

    It's well crafted though. If I hadn't known it was meant to be all one-syllable words I would hardly have noticed. It read and flowed so naturally anyway.

    Well done.