Prologue

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His long, thin finger traced the length of her pronounced cheekbone, his skin cold against hers. Her rose red lips were parted into a tiny O-shape, and her large, indigo eyes were closed. She savoured every moment of his closeness, enjoying the sensation of being touched without being hurt. She ran her fingers through his coal black hair, and gently touched the back of his neck with her other as he lent forwards to kiss her. His mouth brushed her long, elegant neck his breath tickling her. She giggled. Her laughing abruptly stopped as an agonizing sensation shot though her neck, her head, her arms, down her body and finally her legs until every inch of her body stung. She wriggled, her brain frantically wondering what caused such pain. The man withdrew from the woman, and wiped the blood off his mouth with the back of his hand. "Such, such sweet blood," he told her, "enjoy the last moment of your life - as a mortal." and added, his lips curling back into a slow smile, a low chuckle murmuring in her ear "Pain is good," in a low seductive whisper. He rose from the seat gracefully, and left her crying, shaking and dying under the moonlight. 3

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  • Toxic Valentine
    March 24
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    Very dramatic, thank you for entering.


  • Rose Hathaway
    February 18

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    This is a very interesting read. I enjoyed the contrast, the drama and how dark it was. Well done. Thanks for entering!

    --Nessie--


  • Clary--Selene--Tayy gold member
    February 14
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    thanks for your entry!


  • ToxicBlood
    February 14
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    Nice. Is there more to it? Like an actual story or is it just a one-shot?

  • SilentMoonDance
    February 13

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    Well...

    This was a very interesting read, if a little cliche. Like any other vampire story I've heard. It would be nice if there was more to the story--something that explained how things came to be.
    Great write, though.(:


    • Lois.Stone
      February 16
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      Lol, yeah, it is a little cliche - but I enjoyed writing it, so it's fine with me that it's like that. Thanks for commenting. Loisx


  • CrystalTigress
    February 13

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    wow

    that is a powerful and emotional start to a story. i can't wait to see the rest. good luck in the contest


  • Keirii
    February 12

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    WOW!!!

    Wow!!! That was really good and really interesting. You could make that into a short story. I like how Edward is especially darker in this one.

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