My Sign

I wear my love on my shirt
Around my neck and on these hands
To separate what opposites I face
And to help the world
With my helping hands1

Peace.2

This is the sign I live for each day.
To help another family stay together
And to help the world be better.
I hold up my sign
The Peace Sign
As a symbol of love
A vision of greatness
For the people
Who love each other…
And would rather make love
To spread it around
To stop the harm war causes.3

To hold up my fingers
In a crowd of people,
I would not be alone.
Who doesn’t want peace?
Who wants to bury the bodies
Of loved ones dead because of war?4

Not I.
Not anymore.

Author notes

I wear a peace sign some how.
My friend as one tattooed, I wear it with pen or jewelary and we express it freely.

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  • Poopa Thug
    February 16

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    Good

    I liked this poem and the flow of it. I even get the rhyming war with anymore, but... the anymore line seems like something the narrator wouldn't say so much. I say that because I don't really think the narrator would really ever feel that they wanted to bury the bodies of loved ones.
    Aside from that bit of confusion I did think this was a beautiful poem and that it says a lot about expression, respect, and love.


  • Indistrict Cullen
    February 14
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    This was beautiful, and not only did you write it as a poem, which is in itself amazing, but you managed to make it sound like you were explaining it to someone, and by the end of the poem, I was totally convinced that the peace sign is an expressive symbol for peace and not just an overcommercialized trinket for hipsters to wear as earrings, even though that IS actually what I think. Great job!


    • MetroHollywoodTeen
      February 16
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      Thank you so much. I am glad you saw it the way you have. Peace has been what I have been wanting to write about and you totally saw what I was showing.
      Again, thank you.

      Suzann


  • chikarita2
    February 12

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    I like it! I can really get the image of what's going on, even though the descriptions are a little vague. The flow is only bad if you are looking for it, but you worded it so well that I can't even notice! Something to change might be in the 2nd major section where you say "The Peace Sign," you should uncapitalize the letters. It would just look a little better
    anyways it's a great piece of writing and keep at it!


  • Valkyrie silver member
    February 12

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    That's beautiful. I love the flow you use, and the descriptions you work in of what peace is, and how through you peace is a verb. Great write.


  • davidAmorguson
    February 12
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    mmm

    i like this, you have very beautiful prose

  • SilentMoonDance
    February 12

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    Well...

    This is a very compelling piece, I wholeheartedly agree with you. Peace is what I try to go by, and I wish others would take cue and stop all the arguing, fighting, war...it's so unnecessary. We should all get along and not judge others because of their opposing view on things. It's childish.

    In my opinion, this was the strongest part of your poem:

    This is the sign I live for each day.
    To help another family stay together
    And to help the world be better.
    I hold up my sign
    The Peace Sign
    As a symbol of love
    A vision of greatness

    Thanks for this inspirational write.(:

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