For the one I love1
This is for you2
I love you more3
With each passing day4
When we kiss5
Time stands still6
Nothing makes me more alive than you do7
Our love will always be true8
When I hold you9
Theres nothing else I want to do10
Only you sweetheart11
Let this be our hearts desire12
We both know13
Being together is all we ever need14
I love you15
Be with me16
Let our love become as bright as the stars17
As our love will conquer all 18
You are as beautiful as a red red rose19
I love you20
just something that popped into my head
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this is very sweet! job well done!
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awww thats one of the sweetest thigs
me loves it
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Who do you love??
I'm just messing with you
This was good. I loved it.
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aw very sweet I found the repition mildly confusing but I think it works cos it kinda adds to the passion of the peice
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speechless
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this is sooo good.
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wow wish i oculd make up stuff like this out of my head !!
keep it up
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Definitely cute.
The repetition gets a little tiring but it's pretty nice for an off-the-head instant poem.
Some of the lines made me go "awww".
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awww it's so cute daddy
i love it! ^-^ hehe
good job daddy
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awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww cuteness
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awww, I loved this poem. It's so sweet. You're such a good poet Dave
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Awwwww very cute!!!!!
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And you were complaining to me that you thought you were a rubbish writer!!! This is SO sweet!! I love it!!!!
'Let this be our hearts desire12
We both know13
Being together is all we ever need'
This is my favourite bit.
AWESOME!!!!
Kais x x
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This is sweet ^^ I like it.
minor notes:
"hearts" needs an apostrophe.
And you also need some punctuation in there, or else it will lose its meaning ^^
Thanks
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Its cute Dave. lol, I Luv it!!!
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