exhaustion. work. procrastanation.1
bewildered by the lack of explanation2
no i do not know.3
laying down in my bed4
a rush of bible characters float through my head5
a sign, sorry no. just a dream6
a dream of Job. things were bad & never got better7
a dream of Job. lost everything & found nothing8
he stayed with God, thick and thin.9
he kept his modesty, and kept his anger in.10
heartbroken by things that are and things that has never been11
why Job? Why did you suffer, to prove a point?12
eventhough justice is an illusion and there is no fairness13
Job, eventhough you are a relic of childhood fantasy you keep me playing14
i am still breathing, i am still smiling, thank you15
Author notes
as a child i found religion and i loved it alot at the time, my favorite story in the old testiment was the book of Job
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no, i like criticism but this came to me, when things come to me naturally like this one did, i believe it is art. My art has flaws like paintings, but thats what make it my art. I should be capitalized, I know this I have had English classes for the last 12 years of my life
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I like it, but it needs a little work. The fourth and 5th lines are suppose to rhyme(which they do) but the syllable difference is big and makes it not flow correctly into the next section. For the most part, rhyming lines should be pretty similar. They should have the same theme(unless showing contradiction) and be about the same with different wording.
Also, the first line should be split up. Maybe sorted from longest->smallest or vice versa?
Oh, and I should be capital.
This is something I could learn to like
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