You are the guy who's dreamy eyes make me smile,1
You are the guy who's voice makes me shake,2
You are the guy that makes me happy,3
The guy I want beside me when I wake.4
The eyes or the smile...5
What is it about you that I like?6
The fact that you make me happy...7
What is it about you that I like?8
You are the guy who I think of when I'm down,9
Because I know you could cheer me up,10
You are the guy I want to be with all the time,11
Because I miss you all too much.12
The eyes or the smile...13
What is it about you that I like?14
The fact that you make me happy...15
What is it about you that I like?16
You are the guy I want too be with,17
You are the guy I need beside me,18
You are the guy I know won't hurt me,19
But love me, as I love you.20
The eyes or the smile...21
What is it about you that I like?22
The fact that you make me happy...23
What is it about you that I like?24
You are the guy I always want too be with,25
But I can't, not all the time,26
I always want too be with you,27
But I miss you even more when I say goodbye.28
The eyes or the smile...29
What is it about you that I like?30
The fact that you make me happy...31
What is it about you that I like?32
You are the guy I...33
Author notes
wel...my mates will know who thats about. i hope you like it!
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ooooooo btw julie....i dno what it wa,s it was because it sounded better to finish with than the whole of that verse stanze thing. lol
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Good written baby , wow , did he sees this poem already ?
really I saw this before on the msn that you set it as your nickname for the first stanz as I told you before this is really sweet !! really I feel your feellings to him really so strong girl !! ok , beautiful done ! Keep on writting the best job !
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wow! thanks for the amazing comment julie!!!! thats well good, i happy now! lol
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Hey. U frube u are just a good writer as anyone else and dont think different.this is such a beautiful piece of work you really show how much you care about *cough* chris *cough* hehe.
You have a good grammatical structure and you have made a very impressive write. I can really feel the strong emotions you have for this guy.
The use of repettition really gives a good strong rhythm through your poem. I am really curious about the last line? "You are the guy I..." is it a cliffhanger to leave the viewers guessing, either way it leaves an effective closure.
You really have done a credit to this work well done and good luck in the competition. Julz x -
wow! thanks, i personally think this is one of my better writes so thanks for the comment!
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Another wonderful one!!UH!I just love this!I feel like exactly this way!!You have done a fantastic job getting this emotion out!Terrific piece!
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yeah ^ ^ ^ think you all guessed that was whu it was for anyway likes but nm. lol, thnx for gr8 commen i need find a contest for this one, lol.
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LOL think we all know who this is about babe. Really creative shows your true feelings and expresses them really well. You better make sure he doesnt hurt you or else hes gonna be dealing with me hehehe. I love your use of description and how you explained the way you feel keep it up babe
Amazing write xxxxxxxxxxx
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*cough cough* chris *cough cough* LOL yeah but dont think it will happen for me to know! only 2 more to comment on
Edited on Jun 06, 12:08 because 'rong smiley'. -
hmmm i wonder who? lol, look you never know til its happened yeh? ok, so im sure it will all be sorted, but hey nice poem *winks* wicked stuff. l8az love ya sky xxxxxxx
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love this. great poem. really sweet. i like ur poems- tthey all have a really good flow to it.
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c, lol!
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awwwwwwwwwwwww, dats so cute hun. is it bout d, or c?!?!?! confusion now!! love ya xxx
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thanks, yeah but i dont think that would quite be happening atm as im only 13! lol. but it fitted in perfectly and if i was older it would be true. thanks for the great comment x x
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That first stanza is my very favourite, especially the line about having the guy beside you when you wake. Gold! lol Great poem, and thanks for sharing!
Love and light,
Jenna
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