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It crippled me. I lost control of all sense of logic. I thought to myself "Is this right?" 23
Then I realized I didn't care anymore. I put all the troubles behind me and let his soft lips touch mine. They were thirsty. I drank each kiss one after another savoring his taste. My mind was racing. Despite everyone else who thought it was wrong, I wanted it, I wanted him. He held me tight. Our bodies molded in to one anothers perfectly. He picked me up gently but firm and in less than a second we were in his bed. I didn't want to wait,I was ready to just rip our clothes off and make love. I tried to unfasten his belt but he restrained me. He told me "I want to savor you."45
My Ears were ringing, his voice was so distinct. 67
His fingers moved elequently down my shirt, dislocating every button from its hole. He slipped it off slowly. Goosebumps rolled down my body devouring me whole. He traced fingers along my curves each and every way. 89
He was teasing me, I hated it and loved it at the same time, but I could play that game too.1011
I gave my hips a tug and soon enough I was on top. He leaned up just enough so i could slip his shirt off. I traced his upper body with my tounge feeling his body tighten, I coulnt wait any long. I took his pants off and he kicked them off the bed. I needed him. I bent down to kiss him while his fingers slid up my inner thigh. I was hot and weak. I wanted him inside me. I throbbed all over. We were both ready. He moved my panties out of the way and arranged his boxers to let his bulge out. My mind was racing. He started to slide it in me. It went easy because I was wet. 1213
He had just got it in when the lights turned on. I was stunned like a dear in headlights. He looked more hurt. 1415
I covered my self with a silky sheet unsure of my next move. A long tall women stood in front of me. Her hair blonde, similar to mine maybe just a little shorter. Her dark blue eyes gunned toward me and him. I didn't know his lover looked so much like me. It was scary. I tried to read her eyes, but what I seen was not angry or sadness it was approval...1617
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I new at this its my first story so please dont be harsh should I continue or no?
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you are the author and you have to decide. Its really just a bit too erotic for me. Seems to be well written with a mystery to drag the reader in, and keep him reading. you have the skill needed. there is a fine line between erotic and porn, and I don't know where it is.
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wow... I am a critic in some views so just to let you know I'm not being harsh. You should not tell ppl not to be harsh or to be easy on you. A real writer doesn't care what others think. They take the advice they are given and make magical art. And just to let you know this is magic... you ARE a real writer.
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