Deep within 2

A tear dripped onto Lou’s face, and her eyelids flickered, Anna-lee looked down quickly and called ‘Lou? Lou…?’ Her eyelids flickered again and took a long deep breath; she called for a nurse and quickly told her that she thought Lou was awaking. 1

Meg ran back into the room and gasped ‘W...Whats happened? Is she ok?’ she asked starting panic. The nurse smiled and reassured her ‘Nothing has happened; she’s making good progress though’. Meg sighed in relief, and then remembered why she was here in the first place.2

‘This is all you’re fault; you know why she did this don’t you?’ she asked Anna-lee with anger in her voice, ‘No…yes but it’s not my fau…’ she replied, braking off sobbing. She sat down beside the hospital bed that Lou was in and laid her head on her arms and just sat there sobbing with Meg Glaring silently at her. 3

Anna-lee was crying gently when she suddenly felt a hand play with her hair; she slowly looked up and saw that Lou was awake. ‘Oh my god Lou why…?’ she started before Meg cut in. ‘Honey why? Why? What have I done to make you feel like this?’ she asked franticly. But before Lou could answer a nurse and a doctor came rushing in asking Lou all sorts of questions while Meg and Anna-lee where hurried out of the room. A nurse showed them into the corridor where they watched Lou and the doctors. They were stood there for about 15 minutes until they were told they could go back in to see her. 4

When they were back with Lou she smiled weakly, ‘Lou why? Why? What have I done to make you feel this way’ asked Meg quietly but Lou didn’t answer so Anna-lee tried asking her ‘Please what have I done? Talk to us please’ her voice sounded calm but behind it there was a tone of hurt, love and guilt. Lou looked away with tears in here eyes before answering ‘I...i did it to save you I couldn’t bear hurting you anymore. I am just sick of life as I can’t seem to do anything right.’ She then began silently crying while Anna-lee and Meg thought this over. After a few minutes Anna-lee said ‘I’m so sorry hun I never meant to hurt you’ 5

‘It’s not your fault, it’s nobody’s, if anybody’s it’s mine’6

‘I’m so glad your ok though, I mean..’ Anna-lee looked at Meg quickly 'we are both glad, please never again’ after saying this she sighed in relief. ‘Oh god’ she thought ‘What have I done ? I’ve ruined everything. It’s all my fault. I started it all’  Lou looked up into Anna-lee's face ‘Ann I know what your thinking, please don’t blame it on yourself’ But Anna-lee just looked away tears sliding down her face. 7

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  • xBexMyxKoibitox
    June 2, 2005
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    Sweetness.This is so sad,yet inspiring.I've lost friends to this.


  • CianLOVES
    June 2, 2005
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    Thanks for your comments, but it's a story by the way

  • Shakari
    June 2, 2005
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    Wow! I love this! It was as good as the first one! I know people who have felt the way Lou has in this poem! Wonderful job there!

  • seaforgod
    June 2, 2005
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    i can really see your heart and feelings come through in the words .. you have alott of feelings and i loved the poem and it really made me think please take a look at mine and i will continue to read yours great job and may God bless everything in your life please keep writing this fantastic work great job again