And they were1
Holding so very close2
To each other3
In silence4
With5
Each gentle kiss meaning6
Much more than7
Either one8
Knows9
And then she looked 10
Into his deep11
Blue eyes12
With13
The reminiscence of sweet14
Love and 15
Ecstasy 16
From past moments 17
Like these18
Now19
from past 20
to present day 21
a love that 22
will always be 23
friendship, love 24
embracing each moment 25
shared 26
forever, is not 27
long enough 28
to express 29
the love 30
these two lovers 31
share 32
Author notes
Holy shit..I can NOT finish this. Help is wanted..
What did you think? Please comment!
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...oooh...-leans closer- Niiice. Ah liiike eet! (I like it, in other words). It is happy. You don't know how little happy stuff is on this site. When unpoetic people think of poetry they usually think of mushy flowery butterfly stuff...not at AP, no way! But this...this is good! I have a profound appreciation for stories, especially. I would help you, but I don't know what you mean by help. You got writer's block? I think it's good how it is.
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Well... Nice, simple, and rather sweet.
Good job.
Jade -
Thats brillant
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very cool girlie!!! =)
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Wonderful! Absolutely lovely! This is such a great write; I will definitely have to come back and read more!
Little-Lovah -
Sarah don't change this one its great the way it is. You and Jackie are so lucky to have a relationship like yall do(this poem is about jackie right...?) even though yall can only see eachother about 20 seconds a day (lol)
love ya girl
-Amanda -
this is wonderful...it flows in such a unique way, it completely works! way to go!! i think it sounds completely fine, but if you want to add to it, go ahead..whatever you add is sure to be beautiful keep up the good work!
manda -
I think it is done
i like it just that way.
you can't just add something artificially
or it wouldn't be real. -
"The reminiscence of sweet
Love and
Ecstasy
From past moments
Like these
Now"
.......
from past
to present day
a love that
will always be
friendship, love
embracing each moment
shared
forever, is not
long enough
to express
the love
these two lovers
share
hmm? uhm, yeah ok! well whatever! =P I thought I was helping, but, I dont know if it turned out too great! Oh well, just suggestions! I like this write, although I think you are right, it is imcomplete. Good luck finishing this one missy! -
Hey, Sarah. Thanks for your comment on my poem. I'm sorry if it made you feel weird. You know how I feel. Jackie's like a magnet!!! lol Anyway, I really hope there aren't any hard feelings between us. To set the record straight: none of it is true. I think you know what I mean. I hope we can get to be friends. I hear you're a great one to have.
-Rosa
P.S. This poem rocks. It's so sweet! Love it. -
i love this one especialy the last 5 lines they are so simple but profound like... yeah well i never could have thought of them. this will turn in to some thing way groovy
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thats so awesome! the form of it, and the words. they flow so beautifully. i think it seems perfect just the way it is, but if you think it's unfinished.. ....i can't wait ti read the rest!! lol.
-Leila -
How sweet
Great job, keep up the great work! - can't wait to read the finished product!
Peace 
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Aw! this kicks ass~!..so far! cant wait to see when its done!
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Those blue eyes love you, too, sweetie.
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