Deep within

‘Damn’ Anna-lee thought ‘why won’t they tell me anything’. Anna-lee was stood in a hospital waiting room; she started pacing up and down the narrow room. She was so worried; she shot a sad look at Meg who was crying. ‘Lou why? I’m so sorry, what have we done to make you feel like this, what’s the matter? Why wont you walk to us anymore, I love you, you know I do’ her thoughts were going around and around in her head, mixing up and confusing. 1

A nurse came in ‘She’s fighting for life, she lost a lot of blood and you do know that we’ll have to contact social services’ we nodded and mumbled a reply. ‘You may go through and see her now’ add the nurse before walking out, Meg and I quickly followed her out of the waiting room and into Recess where Lou was connected to with all sorts of wires, the only sound that they could hear was the soft beeping noise of the cardiogram she was hooked up to. Anna-lee’s eyes flicked to Lou’s wrists where she saw 50 or so red jagged cuts. Anna-lee guess that she had done it with either a sharp knife or a razorblade, the latter was more likely. She shuddered and thought 'Why..? Why...? oh god no'.2

She could feel tears well up in her eyes and a salty tear slid down her cheek, she staggered helplessly backwards. Her mascara was smudging as torrents of tears were now raging down her face. Meg ran out of the room, she was in pieces but Anna-lee decided not to run after her as she was a mess herself. She stood up and walked slowly over to Lou, her hand reached out and touched her face and whispered ‘Keep fighting we all love you please Lou, please, please…’ Anna-lee's voice faded out as she started sobbing again.3

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This is just the start . i thought i'd only post this much to see if people liked it, if you do i'll post more. thankz Daemon xxx

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  • CianLOVES
    June 2, 2005
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    thank there is a part two aswell

  • xBexMyxKoibitox
    June 2, 2005
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    This is an awsome story!I should post my anime story.Keep up the good work.



    ~Anubisuss


  • CianLOVES
    June 2, 2005
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    Ok thanks for the comment. im going to add another bit in a minute

  • Shakari
    June 2, 2005
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    This story makes tears roll down my cheeks! You should make a sequel or another chapeter to this, because then, I would keep reading, for the sadness in here overwhelms, and makes you feel as though it is happening to you! Great job!

  • Blazing White Wolf
    June 2, 2005
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    this has potential depending on hwere you take it but i would say write on and see what comes of this. it kept me interested
    love and light
    blaze

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