"You never met us,"She breathed it sent shivers down my neck.1
I just stared back. You arent going to let this go are you?"2
"No" She frowned,"It doesnt matter either way,"She snapped back. "I know but you'll still be here,"I replied. She sighed,"You just won't know it." Then she released her grip on my shirt ,and i was falling only a few feet. Still it seemed like forever.
"Your not gonna make this easy,oh well?"3
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Well so far I see little issues. After you finish some kind of dialogue, press the space button and then type your next word so it seems more readable.
"It doesn(')t matter(,) either way(.)" So I edited the punctuation.
"...and (I) was falling..." Capitalise your 'I'.
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