If Only

I can feel my heart beating1

When I see that sun rise2

For a know another day3

Is terrible through my eyes4

If you could only go through5

The daily things I bare6

You might just see the different7

If only you could stare8

How would you feel9

If what you did was never right10

To embrace every beating11

Every day and every night12

Its hard to follow one rule13

When they are always changing14

When you slam your fist against the wall15

The neighbors hear the banging16

Im surprised they never seen it17

For its been hear quite all along18

I wonder how far this will continue19

I hope not very long20

One I day I will grow up21

And I will be myself22

I will not be your puppet23

Living on a shelf24

I know I cannot run away25

You’ll always track me down26

Taking my life would be the coward’s way27

But I fear there’s no way else…28

I leave nothing for your memory29

No one ever cared for me30

Im sorry god, I know im wrong31

If only they could see32

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I hated this when i first wrote it but Ashley insists its good

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  • flowerbee1234
    May 9

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    Depressing

    Oh, Dawn, this is so sad but powerful... brings a tear to my eye. Just keep your head held high and things will get better; have faith in yourself and in God.


  • Rawrr.
    February 5

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    .....This has made me cry.

    Please don't be true. The words are so strong. It's really good.

  • Non Paix
    February 2

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    This had a lot of emotion, however, it did not flow so great, it seemed a bit forced. All and all it was not bad, you could just work on flow a bit.


  • Melissa Loves Jeffy
    February 2

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    Its is pretty good but you could make the flow better. i have problems with flow a LOT! lol. Mostly when really have to say something but don't know how to say it. But this is great and I really hope its not true that you plan to take your life. there are those who care for you but sometimes we are blinded by lack of sight of whos there.

  • TheDecree
    February 2
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    Wow, this is a pretty heartfelt poem, nice job

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