They say that we could make it,
but I don't think that's true.
If that's the case then why have I
spent my whole life hating you?1
All the things I've gone and done,
and all the things I've said,
all the things I've done to you
that make you wish you'd wake up dead.2
Because of who I am and who you are,
I don't think we'll make it far.
We can try and we will fail,
but at least we'll know what happens in the end.3
When two opposites attract,
no good can come of it.
We can hope and we can dream,
but you can't fly if you don't have wings.4
It's a hopeless cause,
a hopeless case,
a futile try in a futile race,
but who am I to say
what will happen in the end?
Who are you to say
who you will call your friend?5
Who am I?
Who are you?
Who are we?
Who am I?
Who are you?
Who are we?
Are we even
anything?
In a list
A contest entry
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error! due to a long conflict by a firnd of mine, we concluded that it is impossible to "wake up dead"!
ANYway, this seems kinda dark for your stuff, but idk. -
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i don't see how its dark, its just about a couple who is extremely unalike. its from the point of view of someone who always thought she hated the other, than realized she loved him but would never be a good match for him.
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phew
I think this poem has a true ring to it -
that was great. it rhymed very well. It flowed greatly. I enjoyed it. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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Abaddon's Cathedral
Hey thur. I seem to have already commented on this poem before, so I'll just thank you for entering my contest and wish you luck. ^^ -
The message in in these words is pretty rivetting, and I know a lot of people who've gone through that sort of thing. When opposites attract, it fails more than it succeeds.
Good writing, great rhyming, but I would suggest stanzas and structure, though this might've been SW's fault - that whole "fix line spacing" shiz. Thanks for the read.
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I'm in love with this song.
Nice as hell dude.
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Wow. It had a very smooth beat to it and some of the lines in here were just BRILLIANT. Example:
"All the things I've gone and done,
and all the things I've said,
all the things I've done to you
that make you wish you'd wake up dead."
It clicked together and took my breath away like great poetry is suppose to do. You're definitely artistic!
Keep writing.
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Speachless....
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