Ice Prince Chapter 1 I Do?!

Ice Prince Chapter 11

I Do?!2

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Hi and welcome to Ice Prince. This is my story and its kinda new kinda not. Anyway, I would appreciate constructive criticism, not just plain rude. So if your a hater, don't read and don't comment!4

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I spun around quickly on my heels as I saw the dorm leader talking to what seemed like a very important person. 6

"Dang it! I have the worst timing ever!" I hissed as I began to make my way back through the corridor. 7

But it was not to be, for out of the corner of my eye I saw the headmistress, a horse-faced woman in my opinion, stalking towards me with a thunderous look. I glanced around frantically for an escape route, but with my luck, there was none. All I could do was bear up nobly under her wrath, which inevitably, would fall on me. I squared my shoulders and took a deep breath as she drew near. 8

"Rika!" she shrieked, even though I was only two feet away. Her piercing gaze fell on me as I shuddered, 9

"What an unsightly young lady!" she said as she sized me up with a shake of her head, making her grey hair loosen from it precarious perch atop her head. "Today, a maid reported to me that they had seen you with a basket of kittens! What is the meaning of this!? Explain yourself! You know the rules, pets are not allowed on the school grounds!" she huffed as her face turned a beat-red. 10

I grimaced but if I even tried to get one word in she would cut me off with another of her tirades, and I was not looking forward to inciting her wrath on me. Even if I tried to explain that I had found them abandoned outside, in the rain, she wouldn't listen. She had what I liked to call "selective hearing." 11

"To top it off," she began as I braced myself, "You've soiled your school uniform!" 12

I looked down as she bellowed at some unseen person miles away, who, apparently couldn't hear very well. My dress was, as she said "soiled," but I didn't care. The simple navy-blue frock meant nothing to me. I could always wash it, right then I was just hoping she wouldn't have my room searched and get her spiney hands on those sweet kittens. 13

"I'm sorry, ma'am," I said in a tempered response, even though I wished for nothing more than to deck her or to cry. 14

I couldn't decide which. Those tears weren't far off either and I could feel several already making a path down my cheeks. 15

"Stop this nonsense at once! A real lady bears up nobly and with dignity... Such shameful behaviour!" 16

That was the last straw, I wasn't gonna stand there and take this! I had feelings too, I wasn't some stone wall that words would hit without causing any damage! I could hear and I could feel, if you cut me I would bleed. This woman didn't seem to comprehend. 17

"Now, now, headmistress, Milicent. I'm sure the girl meant no harm and just wanted to shelter the poor dears from last night's rain. And I'm sure," came a clear ringing voice over me as I felt a soft hand land on my shoulder, "that she will take the kittens, when they are old enough, to the shelter..." 18

I lifted my head and pulled my long silky blonde hair out of my eyes to look at the woman who seemed to know my very heart. She was tall and elegant and I gasped at her beauty, she seemed to hold herself with dignity, she was a person of great importance in my eyes; and her long scarlet red dress and white cloak only added to her illumination. Upon her golden head was a small demure cap and her blue eyes gazed down on me without retribution. 19

My mouth opened in an unlady-like manner but no sound came out. She only smiled, I was speechless, the headmistress was speechless. Now that was a miracle! 20

"A-ambassador, Ferrina! I was not told that you w-would be coming today...! Here, let me get this girl out of your way...! I'm sorry, for her--" 21

"It's quite alright..." said Ambassador Ferrina with a dignified nod and a glistening smile. "I decided to drop by on a whim. I should apologize..." 22

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The Ambassador sipped on her tea as she sat down in a comfortable parlor that was brightly decorated with silver and light green. She placed her small teacup on her china plate without even making a clink. "Why did you sneak out without telling me, ma'am!?" came a shrill voice to Ferrina's ears. She closed her eyes as she smiled. 24

"Come now, Amy, we're in private. Enough with fromalities. More importantly, shouldn't you be used to this kind of thing by now?"25

"Ferrina! Stay serious, you are an important person! You can't forget that the Prime Minister is counting on you to complete this task." said her good friend.26

Ferrina only laughed as she kicked off her shoes to get more comfortable and stretched lazily like a cat on the divan. 27

"Oh, that! I've already found someone," she said as she waved vaguely at a folder on the tea table next to her.28

"What so soon?! Who?" Amy asked with bewilderment as she picked up the folder and flipped through it.29

"A certain, Rika Varnese..."30

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I let out an unbelievably loud and aggravated sigh as I tossed the letter I held into the air. It floated slowly to the ground, not the desired effect that had I wanted. "What does this mean! Why would the Ambassador want to speak with me!? And the Prime Minister too!" I wailed as I flung myself on my bed. Several giggles came to me and I instantly knew I was the object of some crude joke.32

"She probably slept with the Prime Minister to gain his favor, I hear that's the only way to get any recognition around here!"33

"Does that mean she'll meet the Prince?"34

"I should hope not! She'll taint his pure innocence! Besides, if he winds up with anyone it will be lady Dannira!" 35

The girl's all shared a laugh as they sent glares towards me. This was the last thing I needed! All I wanted was to get through school without causing myself to stand out like a fool. But I couldn't get out of this, to refuse someone of power would bring horrible things upon my head. I'd just have to deal with it!36

I stood up and rummaged through my clothes for something suitable to wear, finding nothing. In my head I was playing all the scenes of what I could do wrong when someone tapped on my shoulder. I nearly shrieked with terror until I turned around to look at a pleasant looking woman, with short brown hair and dove-like eyes, she was wearing a formal suit and glasses.37

"Pardon me," she said, "I'm the Ambassador's personal secretary and she has informed me that the Prime Minister won't be able to make it and that the Prince will be coming in his place." She stunned me with her words but she went on, not seeming to notice," She also informed me that you should attend the meeting in these..." She motioned behind her as a maid came in carrying some clothes.38

I looked on with shock. No way! This wasn't happening was it? I suddenly felt dizzy and had to sit down. 39

"This can't be real," I said nervously as I looked at the beautiful, exotic looking dress. It was a deep blue which matched my eyes perfectly and it also came with a white jacket and boots.40

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So that's how I found myself before the gorgeous Ambassador. I glanced around as my heart raged within my chest, I could hear it throbbing in my ears as I wondered where the Prince was.42

"He's running late..." Said Ferrina, as if she could read my mind. Or had I said it aloud?43

As I was about to tell her of my discomfort and apologize and leave, the door to the room opened and a young man stepped through. My heart caught in my throat at the sight of him. 44

"This isn't happening!" I sqeaked as I looked at the boy known as the "Ice Prince."45

He was slim and pale, and his black hair was curling under his ears. His face was very solemn and his eyes were cold like ice, the reason behind his nickname. He wore a pure white suit with a blue trim, and by his side hung a silver rapier. His boots clicked on the floor as he came into the room silently and the Ambassador greeted him with a kiss.46

She motioned to me, I was, by now, frozen to my seat. But because of my nature I wasn't weak enough to faint but I wasn't strong enough to get to the hellos. What must he think of me? I was panicking inside as his cold stare fell over me.47

"This is the one...?" He asked in a monotone voice, it was strangely jilted, and I wondered if I had wronged him somehow without knowing. I mean, we had just met!48

"Yes, I chose her personally to be your wife..."49

Suddenly I snapped back into reality. "What!?" That was the first sound to come from me since I came through that door.

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  • Sheilasbabygal4life
    September 14
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    Wow this was very good. I enjoyed reading it. Thanks for entering and best of luck to you in the contest.


  • An Empty World
    September 7

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    Wow. This was so interesting and it kept my attention throughout the entire piece, I must say, you did something right, because ME reading a story that intently is soooooo un-ordinary on SW. I'm looking forward to reading more. Thank you for entering my contest.

  • Good story, I really like it. The storyline is interesting and fun to read, I definetely didn't see the end coming...it was really surprising. It's a wonderful story and I'd love to read more!
    Great Job =]

  • Not bad, though if you want to start anything out "in medias res," you have to be sure that you are including all the background details quickly and subtly so the reader can easily get a feel for the story without becoming too bored. There didn't seem to be enough description of the girl's background at the beginning, so maybe you should rethink that part a little. Otherwise, not a bad story. Thanks for entering!

  • TheDecree
    February 14

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    This was a lovely story. I liked the way you described the prince, and I love the girl's shock when she discovers that she's to be his wife.

    Nice write (:

    Good luck in my contest


  • Tricia3 gold member
    February 4
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    I'm sure you know, it's not horrible

    #4 aloud should be allowed
    #5 insighting should be inciting
    These are the only two errors I found
    You are a very accomplished story teller. I followed every word and it ended much too s oon. I hope you are continuing to work on this. I think it's very good, good plot, good characters and good dialogue
    Trish

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 4, characters: 5.

    • Schuyler VanAlen gold member
      February 5
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      Thanks!

      Thanks for that, Ill fix that right now. The ending too soon part is that a bad thing or good? Does that mean I should make the parts longer? I am continuing. Thanks! Well, Chapter 2 is already out if your interested.


      • Tricia3 gold member
        February 5
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        Good

        It's a good thing. It meant I want to read more. I'll read the next part.
        Trish


  • AmberFire45
    February 1
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    great

    Totally worth is to continue I would. You're onto something good here

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