The Last Day

I woke up that morning like it was any regular day, brushing my teeth, getting dressed, eating a granola bar, and leaving for school. But it wasn't until school that I learned what happened.1

Well, it was rainy outside, and I was in a rush to get to school. I kissed my mom goodbye, grabbed my bagged lunch, and charged into the pouring rain. Running as fast as I could, I ran down the patio steps, through the short grass, and splashed through the mud puddles that came by. 2

The bus ride was quiet as usual, sitting back in my lonely seat, with my partner out sick. Most likely he was playing hookie, but at least I could listen to my I-Pod in peace. I hummed the tune of 'Crazy Train' by Ozzy as the bus drove on to Hillside Middle School. When we got there, I put my hands in my jean pockets as I headed up the stairs, unplugging my little I-Pod. I walked down the hallway until I got to my locker, trying to get the combination. My locker partner, Westly, waved hi to me as he threw his backpack off of his back. "I hate homework," he moaned, taking out all of his books. "They should never give homework on a day like today."3

I grinned, holding the door wide. "Happy birthday, Wes," I cheered, patting his shoulder. "Hey, man, I'm going into homeroom now. I have a lot of science crap to do." I walked out of the deserted hallway with my five books; Geography, Science, Math, English, and the worst, Spanish. My gym bag was on my back, dragging on it filled with bleeched clothes.4

Homeroom was nothing different. My *bunny* teacher yelled at us at least a thousand times for talking until the bell rung. I hurried out trying not to drop anything, going to Math class. Mr. Shaffer, a pretty nice guy, had on a plaid tie and his hair gelled back. "Good morning, class," he greeted, tossing test papers to everyone. "As you know, we have a test today, which is the last points for the third nine weeks. Try your very best. Honestly, it's not that hard, but whatever." I took out my football mechanical pencil when the paper got to me, scrambling through the easy problems. 5

I leaned back in my chair, staring at Carly. She had her nose into a library book while I glanced at her. Already done? I asked myself, tapping my pencil against the desk. Finally after five more minutes, I guessed on some multiple choice questions, and turned it in along with all the other seventeen papers. Last one done. 6

Next class was Geography, which we were learning about Geography. "Good morning, class," the teacher, Mrs. Baker, greeted like any other teacher. "Take out your books and read orally to your partner chapter 17."7

My partner was Jordan Fox, so we discussed together boring South America. "This class makes me so bored," he said to me over everyone's loud voice.8

"I know," I agreed, nodded my head quickly. "Forty five minutes of time wasted." For several minutes, we read the five paragraphs as fast as we could. 9

All of a sudden, the fire alarm went off. Kids everywhere got in a single file line, heading out the exits. "Probably just some kid wanting attention," I whispered to Jordan, covering my brown hair from the rain. 10

We stood outside on the parking lot, watching all of the teachers get out safely. "Everyone here is out," Principal Jacobs said in her walky talky, pacing around us kids nervously. "Can we go back in?"11

I rolled my eyes for I knew this was the dumbest drill ever. Usually we just stand out there for two minutes, and then the teachers direct us back in. But this time was different, a lot different. Soon firetrucks circled the back of the building, shooting their hoses at the smoky windows. Senora Marlin counted her students, miscounting every time in Spanish. "I'm missing one!" she cried out, making the other teachers hover over.12

"Twenty one, twenty two, twenty three," Mr. Shaffer counted, knowing his numbers. "Yeah, we are missing someone!"13

Principal Jacobs talked back in her walky talky to a fireman. "We're missing someone," she explained, then facing Senora Marlin. "Danielle, who's missing?"14

She looked at her clipboard, with her fingers shaking. Every name was checked off except Carly Lucas, my biggest crush ever. "Carly Lucas," she replied, with her eyes filled with tears.15

I jumped at this. My crush had a chance of dying in our school, when I could have saved her. "Carly Lucas," Principal Jacobs repeated.16

I charged as fast as I could towards the school, with shouts of 'No, Cody'! and 'Don't do it'! I ignored them as I threw open the door, looking inside the burning place. As fast as I could, I ran down the stairs, getting into the Spanish room. On the bathroom sign out sheet was her name, signing out at 9: 33. But it was 9:52, so she must have been scared out of her mind. I dashed out of the room, through the long hallway, and by the bathrooms, yelling inside. "Carly!" I screamed, not wanting to go inside the girls' bathroom. "Carly! Are you okay?"17

Being that Carly was so popular, she never talked to me. But on that day, wanting to save her own life, she spoke to me. "What's going on?" she wondered, flushing the toilet. "Cody, I'm really afraid."18

"There's a fire," I told her. "Everybody's outside except you. I came in to save you. Now hurry!"19

She walked out of the stall, poured soap all over her hands, and rubbed them together as the cold water washed them. Carly bolted out of there with her hands wet, and saw me, worried out of my mind. "Take my hand!" I instructed, pulling out my hand. "We can make it out alive!"20

The beauty took my hand, and I felt like a true hero. We, together, charged out of there, facing many challenges. The first one was the fire appearing out in front of the Math room, coming from the teachers' lounge. "Ahh!" she shrieked, tugging my hand harder. "What do we do?"21

We just ran around it, with sweat dripping down my forehead. Finally I could spot the main doors, so we were so glad to open them out alive. Everyone cheered as we waved, acting like a couple. Carly hugged all of her friends, and kissed her boyfriend, Brendon. "I was so worried!" he said to her romantically. The two kept locking lips while I walked depressed down the sidewalk, with people cheering like I was a celebrity. I just swatted my hand and got back in line, like nothing had ever happened. 22

As kids everywhere asked me questions, I answered them with one word like 'Easy' and 'Yeah'. Eventually after ten minutes when my legs were getting tired of standing, the principal announced something. "Students, quiet down!" she yelled, getting everyone to shut up. "Ahem. Thank you. Anyways, the fire dept. said that the fire is nothing major, but leaving you children in there would be too risky. So the secretary is calling parents and guardians to pick you kids up. I repeat, this is nothing major. So just calm down and relax." That was easier said than done, because everyone's mouths started moving with words coming out, like 'This is great!' or 'This is terrible!' 23

Jordan started whispering to me. "If it's not major, then why are we going home?" he asked me, while talking softly. I could barely hear him since everyone was so loud, but I just smiled.24

"Yeah, I know." Then we both became silent and directed kids to be, too. After three more minutes, parents arrived. There was my grandma in her little car, beeping her horn.25

"C'mon, kiddo!" she screamed. I hopped into the car once she drove over to me, and waved at my friends. We drove throughout the suburbs, while having a nice conversation. "So Cody, would you like to go to the mall today?"26

"Sure, grandma. I need a new pair of running shoes for gym class," I explained, rolling down my window. Cool, refreshing air blew in as we talked, making it a pretty nice afternoon.27

When we got to the mall, no one was there. On weekends, tons of kids are there, buying video games and eating pizza in the food court. But today, we did not see one kid. One of grandma's friends were in the department store, so they gabbed endlessly together while I twiddled my thumbs. "Cheryl, I'm surprised to see you here," she greeted at first. "Today almost everyone is afraid to go out."28

"Why is that, Sharon?" questioned my grandma, sipping her can of Pepsi.29

"Didn't you watch the morning news? Today is supposed to be the last day on Earth!" she exclaimed, browsing through the purses. My jaw dropped at this, hardly believing it at all. My grandmother just shook her head and laughed.30

"It's sad that they have nothing else better to talk about then silly rumors," she giggled, pulling a purse off the rack. She set it on the counter, took out some cash, and paid for it.31

"I don't know, Cheryl. I don't think it's a rumor. Anyhow, why is Cody here? Is he playing hooky?"32

"No, his school had a fire. They never went in to details, but some dumb teacher probably forgot to turn off a stove," she joked. But Sharon kept a serious face. 33

"A sign of the end of the world is a fire," she told them truthfully. My grandma just laughed once again, and said goodbye.34

"Bye, Sharon. Great seeing you!" yelled my grandmother, waving her hand in the air. I waved as well.35

"Bye, Cheryl! Bye, Cody! Great seeing you two, too!" she replied.36

The two of us strolled down the main shops and stopped in the food court. We got two slices of pizza each and two sodas. "Grandma?"37

"Yep, sport?"38

"What Sharon said, well, was it true?" I wondered, taking a big bite of my first piece.39

"Sharon is nice, but she's a load of crap with news," grandma replied, having a small laugh. The rest of the lunch was silent, and then we went in the shoe store. I browsed for about five minutes and finally picked out some Nike Shots. I tried them on, they fit, and then she paid. I wore them for the rest of the trip so I could break into them, and they were very comfortable. We passed the mall's bank when we heard a loud boom! Some cries were heard, and we charged as fast as we could away to the arcade room for protection.40

"What was that?" I asked, breathing heavily. 41

"A bank robber. It's okay, the cops will take care of him."42

Behind us came Sharon, with about forty shopping bags in her hands. "Say good bye to earth," she told us, sitting down beside me.43

"It's a big coincidence," whispered my grandma. Finally after a while, cops arrived with guns and attacked the robber, and collected all the money that he stole.44

"You're going to jail," we heard them say, handcuffing him.45

After that we went to my grandma's house, where my pap was taking a nap on the leather couch. "Cody, it's one thirty. Go put away your shoes and call a friend to come over. You two can play together outside," she told me, while unloading her products. 46

I set my shoes down in my room, and then called my friend Jordan. "Hey, Jordan. You wanna play football outside?" I asked him, as he answered.47

"Sure, man! I'll ride my bike to your house, since I live right down the street from your grandma's," he explained. We both hung up the phone, and then I watched some cartoons for a little bit. Family Guy was my fan favorite show, so I watched that until he rang the doorbell. I got up from my seat when he did this, and opened the door to see him wearing a Larry Fitzgerald jersey on, holding a pumped up football.48

We headed outside in the backyard and played catch, trying not to hit anything. "My mom told me today that this was the last day on earth," he said, throwing a spiral pass to me. I jumped up and caught it.49

"So did my grandma's friend at the mall," I replied. "But my grandma said it wasn't true."50

"That's so weird, though. We had a fire today, and really didn't know the cause."51

"When we went to the mall there was a robber, too. But they caught him."52

We played catch, real football, h-o-r-s-e with the basketball on the blacktop, and home run derby with a tennis ball until my grandma called us in at three. "Boys!" she called out, signaling to come in. "There's a storm coming!" A roar of thunder was heard as we put everything away. "Don't worry about that stuff! Just come inside!" We threw everything else on the ground as we got soaked by the rain and walked in. 53

Expecting my pap to still be sleeping, he was watching the TV with his legs up on the chair. The wind outside was so strong that it knocked telephone poles over. "People, get under a roof now!" yelled the news reporter lady from the TV, almost falling over from the wind. "I repeat you must get another a roof now! A terrible storm is heading our way, and as bad as it is now, it will only get worse!"54

"I better go home now," exclaimed Jordan, putting on his skating shoes.55

"Bud, if you could go out there, you could die. The storm is going to be so bad that Jordan will have to sleepover tonight," stated my grandma, putting her hand on Jordan's shoulder. Jordan took off his shoes. 56

"What about mom? Dad?" I asked out of curiosity.57

"They're both coming home from work. Don't worry, Cody, they'll be fine." We ate dinner early that night at about four, after playing games on the computer. We ate TV dinners as we crowded around the fireplace for warmth. I ate my cold turkey silently as my grandparents talked to each other. 58

"Why did earth have to end?" I wondered out of no where, sipping my lemonade.59

"Yeah, I liked the world."60

"It's God's plan," answered my pap, cuddling near my grandma. "Whatever he wants to do is fine."61

"Very true," agreed my grandma. "At least we'll all be in Heaven together." The four of us sat there with many thoughts, such as death, world ending, and many other things. We were all very happy as one family, one community, one life. I was only thirteen, too, so time passed very quickly for me. Time crept by faster than usually, before we knew it, it was five. My parents came home drenched from the rain. 62

"I can't believe I lived through that," stated my mom, wiping her wet high heels on the mat. "Telephone poles everywhere are knocked down, and trees the same."63

My dad, with his hat on backwards, threw his expensive leather jacket on the chair, and said, "I can't believe you guys still have power."64

"Knock on wood," finished my grandma, making sure we still had electric. Jordan and I started laughing at the jinx while everyone got settled in. The now six of us gathered in a circle and talked. "I have a game!"65

"Mom, you have a game at the worst times," chuckled my dad.66

"No, but really! I want everyone to discuss one thing that you loved about your life. Gary, you're first." A few murmurs were heard as my pap tried to think about his life.67

"I have the best of kids," he spoke out, with everyone's attention. My grandma nodded for it was my mom's turn.68

"I found the greatest husband in the world," my mom mentioned, kissing my dad's cheek.69

"I got my painting in a museum," my dad told us. Yeah, my dad was a famous artist, and drew me many pictures of motorcycles, sports, everything. Next was Jordan's turn.70

"My team one the basketball championship," Jordan said, with the lights flickering on and off. It was now 5:23, and the lights were beginning to dim because of the storm. 71

"Continue," my grandma directed, acting like a teacher while her students looked around.72

"I met the best girl ever," I stated, full of emotion.73

"Aww, my son's got a girlfriend!" my mom oohed, hugging me tightly.74

"Mom..."75

"Sorry."76

Then the crowded dining room turned dark, with six pairs of eyes looking around. "Now what do we do?" questioned Jordan, getting up. "I want to be with my parents." 77

My mom kissed his forehead. "The storm is really bad, so you can't come home," she spoke out, with her voice filling the room. 78

It was true. Outside, it looked like a hurricane, with rain pouring around everything. Hours passed endlessly as we sat there, telling stories, when the rain finally stopped at 9:00. I put on my tennis shoes, threw on my jacket, and with my parent's permission, dashed to Carly's house. I had to see her one last time before who knows what happens. Her house seemed pleasant with one little candle lighting the entire room, with her, her mother, and her brother all gathered together. She looked so pretty that night as she answered the door. "Cody, hi," she greeted, not knowing what to say. "What are you here for?"79

I puckered my lips and pressed them against hers. We kissed for a minute, then I said, "Carly, you're an amazing girl. There's only three hours left until the world ends, and I wanted to say bye to one of the most important people I've ever met."80

She grinned a little, then sighed. "This is so sweet, Cody, but..." The clocked ticked very loudly that time, and then the room started shaking. Books fell from bookshelves, and they were having an earthquake. "Mom, what do we do?"81

"Stay calm." 82

That's exactly what we did, for four hours stuck in their house, just talking, and then we died at midnight. A huge asteroid bombed all of earth, and then the whole world became dark. I fell into pieces, remembering my short life, my family, my friends, and Carly. At least I died remembering such a great girl as her, who I did by the way kiss! So that's how I spent my last day living. Kissing my girl, stuck with family and friends, and remembering good memory. Not a great time... 83

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  • yumesandman
    February 15

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    I was really surprised to see what your age was! You write like someone much older. ^_^ Spelling and grammar are good, and the story is interesting. One thing is that you write in what's commonly referred to as Step-by-Step ("Cody did this. Then he did this. Then he..."), which is a good starting place. I would suggest adding more about what they're thinking about; how did they come to believe the world was really ending? Was it the storm? The news?

    You're doing great!


  • Owen Aero
    February 14
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    I enjoyed this quite a bit. It was an interesting idead, seeing the last day of the earth played out as a fairly normal one. There were a few spelling mistakes and some structure issues, but I see someone has already pointed the majority of them out.
    You seem like you have some potential. Keep writing. I'd love to see what else you come up with.


  • yumesandman
    February 3
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    I haven't read it yet, but just a hint- check the contest for anything you may have missed! ~.^

  • Before I do anything else, I had some suggestions:

    P. 2 -"Running as fast as I could, I ran down the patio step... splashed through the mud puddles that came by..." You used ran twice, and I'm pretty sure you want to reword the part about mud puddles - the wording makes it sound like it's the puddles that are moving. Nothing big, I just noticed this as I was reading

    P. 4 -"My gym bag was on my back, draggin on it filled with my bleeched clothes." Something's not right about that- think about rewording it. It doesn't make sense. 'Bleeched' should be 'bleached.'

    P. 7 -"Next class was Geography, which we were learning about Geography." Sort of redundant... of course you'd learn geography in geography Were you trying to say something else here?

    P. 10 -"All of the sudden, the fire alarm went off." There could probably be a better way to put this... what about "I never got to finish those last paragraphs, as I dropped my book when the fire alarm went off, surprising everyone in the room..." or something like that.

    P. 16 -"My crush had a chance of dying in our school, when I could have saved her." Wait, when did she become his crush? o.0 This was never mentioned before. And he couldn't have saved her... he was in Geography...

    P. 17 -"...with shouts of 'No, Cody!'" Maybe 'ignoring the shouts of' would make more sense.

    P. 18 -"Being that Carly was so popular, she never..." <= Might want to reword that. "'What's going on?" she wondered" - there's a fire drill - alarms usually go off in bathrooms, don't they?

    P. 23-"'Anyways, the fire dept. said that the fire is nothing major...'" Don't abbreviate department - she would say the whole word.

    P. 30 and following- If Sharon truly believes that that day was going to be the last day on the Earth, she wouldn't be in a department store, browsing for clothes, would she? She's porbably be saying goodbye to everyone...crying... etc. Or saying it's a hoax. She wouldn't be saying, 'Great seeing you,' but there would be tearful goodbyes. Unless she's sort of cuckoo

    P. 49- If a mother truly believes that day would be the last day on earth, then she wouldn't let her kid just play football.

    It seems a little strange that Cody's parents would give him permission to see Carly... I know most families would want to spend their last hours together.

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    I'm sorry about all of the suggestions You don't have to take them, of course


    Anyways, I think this is a really good idea, and with some revising could make a completely AWESOME story! It's already really good. The suggestions above might help, and a little more description... how is Cody feeling? His parents are obviously trying to be strong for the family, playing a game and all, but wouldn't Cody notice something? Like they aren't acting quite right? Wouldn't Carly be scared?


    Anyways, I think this could be a really good piece with those things. The plot seems good, developing smoothly, and I like most of your characters. This piece could evoke so much emotion in the reader - it already does!

    I think my favorite character is the grandmother - very practical and she seems to keep a bit off good humor in hard times.

    Anyways, this was a very good write, and I can really see this going somewhere with some revising. Good job! Keep up the good work! I really liked this story

    -Paradox


  • angelaononchan
    January 29

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    It was good. A few spelling mistakes. On paragraph seven, I think you can just say 'next class was Geography. At least the boy lived his life to the fullest. And how do you know you died in midnight?

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