Is it just me, or am I screaming?1
Something is telling me that I am but I can’t feel anything. Except for the woman cradling my top half. She rocks back and forth, whispering to me. Her ash blonde hair brushes against my face while she rocks me. My stomach is lodged into my throat. 2
“My baby,” she sobs and continues teetering us back and forth. I push against her, my mind begging her to let me go. “No! You’re my baby, they can’t take you away from me!” She shrieks and rocks faster. “They can’t take you away, you’re mine. They can’t take you away.” She whispers in my ear.3
I shuddered at the sound of her voice. She pulls away and holds me at arms’ length, staring into my eyes.4
“You know what you have to do,” she tells me, softly. I shake my head and try to get away only to have her tighten her grip on me. She runs her hand down my cheek, “you know what you have to do.” 5
I shake my head and she points to the far right corner of the room we’re in. in the corner I see a man, he wears a white t-shirt and blue jeans. He has sandy brown hair with natural blonde highlights and electric blue eyes.6
Her eyes catch mine, they have a mischievous glint to them and she smiles, exposing black and rotten teeth. She nods. Reaching into her back pocket, she hands me a jack knife and nods again. I take the knife silently and leave through the black door that is in the room. I step out into the darkness of my town and begin searching for the man that I was shown. I find him on a basketball court, smoking a cigarette.7
“You know what you have to do.” 8
I approach him and smile, unfolding the knife behind my back. He talks to me, asking me why I’m out so late. But all I do is smile and nod, trying to build up the nerve to do what it is that I have to do.9
Finally, I strike. The blade sinks into his stomach and he releases a tortured groan as I pull it out and let it sink back into his abdomen. His face pales and his pupils dilate while warm, sticky blood oozes onto my hand and on the knife. I see nothing. I feel nothing. I’m just fixated on the sound of his heartbeat slowing, the noise cutting through the air like the jack knife in his stomach. His body collapses and I turn to leave. 10
As I walk, I fold the knife back up and slip it into my pocket. I trail back down the streets and back into the house. She is waiting for me. She greets me as I enter with another bone chilling smile that makes my knees lock up. She can’t hear the walls screaming and the writhing bodies that lay twisted and mangled on the floor. She wipes a trace of blood from the corner of her mouth and holds her hand out for the knife. I reach into my pocket and place it in her palm. Still smiling, she slips it into her back pocket and hugs me.11
I stand stock still while her arms are wrapped around my torso. We sit down on the floor, among the carnage and rotting flesh that rests among us and she rocks us back and forth.12
“My baby,” she whispers again. “You can’t leave me. They can’t take you away from me. You’re mind. You’ll never escape me-you’re mind.” She hisses. I shudder, trying to deny this statement.13
But her words are true.14
I am hers’.15
I can’t escape her.16
She is always with me now.17
Even while I’m awake.18
Author notes
another dream. i've been dreaming of this same person for the last two weeks. i don't think i can get away from her. what's creepy enough is that i see her and feel her when i'm awake now too. maybe it's just me being paranoid and the dreams scaring the shit out of me, but i honestly think that i'm going insane.
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that is way creepy
The beginning of this really gets you into the story, right away I wanted to know who these people were and what was going on. I was pretty chilled at the images I got from this by the end. I would never want to dream about such a person, especially continually. You did a nice job making your dream into a story.beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, overall: 7, ending: 4, characters: 4.
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this is shit scary and creeped me out like hell! love ya
Polly -
Wow, this is very twisted. A horrible dream, but it makes for a great story
Only one suggestion, 'mind' should be 'mine'.
"You’re mind*. You’ll never escape me-you’re mind*." Other than that great job, thanks for entering and good luck. -
wow, this is an awesome story...i dont know how to describe it, but i can sorta relate...but yeah. its really descriptive and mysterious.
advice i can give...she is probably there, because you are scared of her, the more scared you are of her, the more she will follow. next time you feel her presence, try to block her out or something...i dont know...
loves you so much hunni xxxxxxxxx
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yeah it was supposed to be mind. thanks for the comment, it's well appreciated.
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This poem is alright, it depends also on the last lines of it, if it is "mind", then it is an awesome quote, if it should be "mine" then the poem is alright as I said before.
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sorry to hear about the destres you are having im here for you you now that i hope you get better soon all my love
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wow, this story is so twisted....its dark and i love it. i can feel the emotions portrayed in this story..im just sorry its really happening, that its personal...i mean it might not be happening in REAL life but in your dreams and appearently sometimes while your awake you feel this...numbness that only the woman can create...after all, you are her's. this story is so awesome....another great write for the twisted little girl. i love it! keep it up please!
Allie -
wicked
Another great one from you as usual. Kami, I hope that you remember what I had told you to do. And if that doesn't work, then hell, I'm out of suggestions. But great work, and don't let the bitch get the best of you, especially when you're sleeping; when you're awake, just stab her in the eye with a pen, cause we all know that you have one of those with you all the time.
But anyways...Great piece, and keep up the good work...
*Still sits here, waiting for the second part to Soul Asylum*
Love you hun
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kami i love you::hugs::
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is it supposed to be "mine" or "mind"? let me know or change it. anyway,this was an amazing story. it must suck,like,really bad to dream about the same woman every night. lol,sorry,i'm fucked up right now and you know why,so ignore any retarded comments i make.
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this is a really great write, ummm... thats kinda scary that you have people like this in your head and in your nightmares. but i guess it cant be any worse than having little babies and dolls chase you and try to kill you right?
great job
~Joyus
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wow. your head is almost as confusing as mine
good write, I hope I can help you.
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GREAT!!!!!
Kamieo this is so great. I LOVE IT!!! I'm sorry you're having all these crazy dreams girl. I agreee with BB maybe the women IS sending you a message. I don't know. Keep up the great work. love Lissy
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Amazing :-)
Wow Kami this story was amazing. Im so sorry if you are having dreams like this. Maybe you should tell someone about them if it is really scaring you. Thats kinda creepy!!!! Do you know who the girl is? But the dream did make an excellent story. So yeah hun I dont think youre going insane, I just think that woman is trying to send you a message or something...I dunno Well keep up the excellent writing hun!!!! LOVE~BB
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