Big Surprise

Everyday, while his father was out golfing after work, and his mother was shopping, Jaren would log onto the Internet. There he would check his e-mail, talk to friends, the usual. Then, one evening while he was surfing the net, Jaren got an e-mail. It was an invitation from a friend to a secret party being held for all the town druggies. Jaren was surprised. He had only been taking drugs for a little while and had no idea there was even a such thing as a drug party. The e-mail addresses of the hosts were familiar, but he couldn't quit figure out who they were. Finally he remembered, and though he knew going was probably a bad idea, considering who the hosts were, he decided to go anyway.1

For the next two weeks the party was the only thing his friends could talk about. Conversation stopped, however, as soon as they entered Jaren's house. His parents had no idea about his addiction. Though he knew it was inevitable that they would eventually figure it out (He had resorted to stealing money from them to pay for the drugs), He wanted to delay their discovery as long as possible.2

Finally, it was the night of the party. It was easy for Jaren to sneak out-his parents had gone out for dinner hours ago and wouldn't be home until long after dawn. He met his friends at the bus stop, and together they walked to the abandoned warehouse where the party was being held. Their senses were attacked as soon as they entered the building. The sounds of people yelling and laughing, ear-splitting music, and breaking glass wreaked havoc on their ears. Strobe lights and weak lighting tortured their eyes. Smoke was everywhere they went, which, because of the crowd, wasn't very far. Just as they started to get used to it all, the DJ cut the music, and all the spotlights were redirected to the front of the room. The hosts walked up to the front, and once everyone had quieted down, one of them started talking. They had obviously been shooting up earlier, because they were too calm and comfortable for two people addressing a room full of high drug addicts. They were smiling and looking around the room. Then the woman's eyes fell upon Jaren and his friends. She nudged the man next to her, who was still talking and obviously hadn't noticed his wife's distress. Finally, he looked to where she was pointing. They looked at each other, then at Jaren, surprise and horror showing clearly on their faces. They ran out of the room. While they may have been surprised, Jaren wasn't in the least bit. Why should he be? They were just the two people that had unknowingly shown Jaren how to buy, sell, and use drugs. The people who had introduced him to this lifestyle. The people who didn't really play golf or go shopping after work, and never went out to eat. Surprised? Nah... they were just his parents.3

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This was written a couple of years ago, so it's not the best, but I like it anyway! hehe, hope you like it!

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  • Account Closed198
    June 28, 2005
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    Well again like the other, great if tragic message, horribly written, although this is muuuuch better, at least you had more than one paragraph...but it did get a bit confusing toward the end...yeh rudhed it deary.

    Ta-Ta deary,
    Emonquente

  • already heard
    October 27, 2003
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    well...it was good. i like the irony, but you could've made more conflict or suspense before the climax. keep writin

  • The Chartown Gent
    October 23, 2003
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    I think this is the place where my evil laugh would be inserted...R I G H T ---> here...*Evil Laugh*...Ok, now that that was over, I must say that the twist on the end was very funny in a dark, gothic sort of way. To find the parents were addicts just like he was, "Oh sweet irony, pierce through this poor soul like a dagger..." That was a rather interesting story that I enjoyed muchly so. You do an excellent job at story-writing as well; my only suggestion would be to perhaps make the ending a little less obvious. The only reason that I say this is because, I don't know, maybe it's just my perception, but I could see right through it about 3/4's of the way through it. Anyway, it was awesome, so keep up the good work and I look forwrd to reading many-a-more of your writings.

    Keep up the good fight; it's all we have left...

  • Irilis4u
    October 22, 2003
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    Hi, well I did suspect it was the parents, at the end, but it was still a twisted ending, and a good story, keep up the good work,
    :-), much love,
    ~Iris~

  • ghostofyourfuture
    October 7, 2003
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    hey chick,
    hy this is a cool story i totally didnt expect that at the end. well ima look at ur other stuff then go to bed/ <3/y/l/a/s

  • gingermint
    October 6, 2003
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    Just his parents? Phew, that is a strange twist.


  • Beauty Sleeps
    October 4, 2003
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    It's really good... What a twist at the end! That was kewl... Anyway, it's a kewl story, and I enjoyed reading it... Keep it up!
    Kate

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