She sits on a chair by the door. She sits there all day and waits for mom and Dad to come home. However, when they do get home, she doesn’t even get a hello. Her Mom and Dad love each other very much. But her? No, they're always wishing she was never born. Her mom never takes time out to wash her only pare of clothes, feed her or, put clean sheets on her bed. Her Dad never takes time to help her fly her whole made kite, send her to school, or give her a goodnight kiss. Her parents are always getting drunk, and are always hitting her. She strives to be good, but they don’t care. She’s never good enough for them. All she wants is to feel love, to be appreciated. She is always covered in bruises and welts. She dreads the nights when Mom and Dad come home drunk. Those nights are always the worst. She tries to hide, but they always find her. She doesn’t want to be hit again. 1
She sits in the corner behind the door, crying to herself. It is a still Friday night. She hears her Mom and Dad walk in with friends, and the usual sound of beer cans opening. She runs to find a place to hide. She runs to her bedroom, goes in her closet and shuts the door. She sits down and starts to cry again. Why does her life have to be this way? Why cant she be like other children? She falls asleep with her stomach rumbling, because she hasn’t eaten in days. She wakes to hear footsteps coming. Closer, and closer they come. She stands up and braces herself. She knows what’s about to happen. Her Parents come in her room. She hears them calling her. She stay’s quiet as a mouse. They open up her closet door. She stays stiff against the wall. It’s no use, they see her and pull her out. They start to hit her. She screams and cries to get them to stop. But they don’t care, they're drunk. She feels the blood in her mouth as she is being tossed around. She hits her head on the wall. She hears them laughing and taunting. They beat her until she goes limp. They throw her in her closet and leave her for dead. She lays there mangled in the corner. She wants to cry but she is too weak. She takes one more raspy breath, and closes her sore wet eyes for the last time. 2
Blond hair, Blue eyes, age Nine. That is all the morgue can verify.3
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She runs around as happy as can be. She has no worries, no fears. She no longer has to sit in the corner, and hide. She has no memory of the past, instead a future, a dream. She lays down in the long tall grass. Today is an important day. She is going to meet her new Father. She sees him in the horizon. She gets up and runs to him. She jumps in his arms. He hugs her and swings her round, and round. She smiles at Him, and He smiles back. Then she knows…. she finally has everything she ever wanted.5
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Comments
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Thank you 'Raydog"
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That was very, very good...I swear, you almost had me in tears...but then the ending, sad as it was, still managed to bring me back to happiness...I really liked the way you used the title of the story as the last line...Well done!
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Very well written, get emotion and descriptive. The ending was sad but happy because she was finally happy. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck!
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The beginning is very shocking, I didn't expect that.
"Blond hair, Blue eyes, age Nine. That is all the morgue can verify." I really like this line, it was really intense and evoked my emotion.
I love the hopeful ending.
This was really sad, but I thought it was very good.
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Well...
The story's a bit melodramatic, if I must say. It seems almost exagerated to the highest degree. I know child abuse happens, but there's something about this story that's non-realistic. But I do like the heart-warming ending, that was wonderful.
While this story can pull emotion from us, I still think it needs improvement.
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Great
It such a sad story
But for some a very real one.
Well written and good pace
Love the ending!
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I've been wowed
Holy crap Nat!!! I no ive read this b4 but everytime i read it, i wanna cry and save her. i luv how she meets Jesus in heaven @ the end
Very good!!!!!
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Yaee! You actually gt the ending..your like the first one! And I really don't know what gave me the inspiration..i just sat down and wrote it one day.
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YAY
she's in Heaven!!!
but yeah thats really sad girl
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Wonderful!
I really hope you're not writing from experience. Too sad, but too common today. Very insightful for one so young. I found a couple of misspelled words, but they didn't matter. I would like to say I enjoyed it, but it was just too sad.
Please keep writing.
beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 4, ending: 4, characters: 4.
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Wow! This is such a sad, sad story. It is well written and very poignant. It makes me feel very sad to think that parent's could ever do that to thier children.
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