Curtis The Dragon And Princess Alexandria

Once apon a time there was a dragon named Curtis. Now, Curtis was not a mean, scary dragon unless he to be, and the thing he wanted most in the world was to be human.1

One day, as Curtis was flying over the land of Chartrand. A lovely kingdom scattered with flowers and trees. It truly was a beautiful sight from above. 2

Then coming from the enchanting beauty below, he heard a desperate cry for help. He looked down and saw a beautiful, young maiden being carried off by Dylan, the evil ogre. Curtis decided he would go to the king to tell him what he saw. (Curtis wasn't very brave either)3

When Curtis landed near the palace, which was so extravagant with jewels and gold, he was greeted by two, serious guards.4

"Leave this kingdom forever or be slain!" They cried to him, with their swords unsheathed.5

"Do not fear," Curtis said to them, in his tiny, shy voice. "I saw a young maiden being carried away by an ogre, and I thought to come here and report it."6

"Oh, very well then. We will send for the king." The largest guard replied, somewhat baffled by this dragons attitude. "How can you have a nice dragon?" He thought to himself.7

The king came out to meet Curtis, a long robe trailing behind him. 8

"Hello Curtis, that maiden you saw being carried off was my daughter." The kind told Curtis the story. "The ogre came to take her and make her his wife to help him reign his ogre kingdom."9

The king told him how the sheer strength of the ogre knocked out 3 of his best guards. 10

"Curtis, you seem like you could take that evil ogre, Dylan, on. Will you, Curtis?"11

"Will I what?" replied the confused dragon.12

"Save my daughter from such a terrible fate?" the king asked Curtis.13

"I don't know, i never 'took' anyone on before," Curtis replied, as shy as ever.14

"Please Curtis, you are our only hope. The ogre forces are too strong for our army, and you might not even have to fight Dylan. You could scare him away." The King pleaded.15

"Alright, I suppose," Curtis said to the king, timidly.16

"Then off you go, farewell," the king said to Curtis as the dragon began to take off.17

Curtis was flying above a dark forest when he heard a young lady weeping. Curtis swooped down to a cave where the sound seemed to be coming from. 18

Curtis went inside to investigate. There, inside the cave, was the beautiful princess, he cheeks stained with tears. 19

"AHhhhhhh!! Please, don't eat me!" the poor girl cried out. "Please!"20

"Hush, fair princess, your father sent me for you," Curtis tried to calm her. "It's okay, I have come to take you home."21

"Why should I trust you," the young lady said, tears in her eyes. "You will take me and eat me" The girl burst into sobs again.22

"I don't want to hurt you, really. i just want to rescue you so no one will be afraid of me anymore," Curtis confided in her. "I hate being a dragon. Everyone thinks I will hurt them, when all I want is a friend"23

Curtis was almost to tears himself and the girl realized he was telling the truth.24

"Take me home," The princess told him.25

They flew for close to 2 hours until the palace was in sight. The whole flight, they talked about their lives and their dreams.26

"I always wanted to be a human so no one would be scared of me." Curtis was near to tears. "Every time i try to make a friend, the run away. i am a vegetarian as much as possible, i only eat meat once a month."27

"I always wanted to be a peasant," The beautiful princess told Curtis, while she was playing with the blue jewel she wore 'round her neck. "I hate being pampered. Everyone bustling over me. I wish i could just be average, or at least have someone who understands me by my side, as a friend."28

"I'll be your friend," Curtis found himself saying. "After i get you home we could be friends and we would understand each other."29

"Curtis," the beautiful girl replied. "That would be very nice." The princess loved the dragon, he was so understanding and nice to her. She truly wanted to be his friend.30

When the arrived at the castle, the king rushed out to see his daughter safe at last.31

"Thank you Curtis," the king praised. "How can I ever repay you?"32

"Well," Curtis said in a tiny voice. "I always wanted to be human"33

"The so be it," the king proclaimed. "Bring me the magic sceptre"34

A servant brought out a lovely, golden sceptre, with a red jewel on top, which the king took in his hands.35

"You are now to be a human," The king said, then he muttered some magic words, and Curtis began to shrink. Then in a few moments, Curtis was a human.36

"Now, there you are Curtis," the king said to him. "If you ever need anything, I will grant it to you."37

Curtis turned to leave when, all of a sudden, the princess burst out, remembering her talk with the timid dragon, how she had felt when they were talking, how he understood her, "Wait! Father, I wish Curtis to be my suitor"38

"Very well then," The king told them. "The wedding will be at dawn"39

The End.40

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Apples, peaches, pears, and plums. Tell me when your birthday comes.
I have read All the rules.
I'm new and i have no idea what you mean by 'Option and Listing'

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  • Rossetti
    June 28, 2005
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    Whilst I agree to some extent with Dragon Dancer regarding some of your expression, I worry about critics who use such clumsy and ungrammatical terms as "grammaticks'!!! The story is cute and works quite well. If you would like to read some great fairy tales try looking at those included by A.S. Byatt in her novel Possession. I think you will enjoy them. Hopefully, you might enjoy reading the complete novel. Good luck and keep writing. Chris.


  • samiesamie91
    June 28, 2005
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    this is great!

  • Wisdom Girl
    June 28, 2005
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    thank you very much. i am very glad that you liked it.


  • Ember Rose
    June 27, 2005
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    I just loved this and cannot imagine why more did not read and comment on this. Thus as I have a few points, I shall promote it. You should do a more novel type for this. It was enchanting. rose


  • dragondancer
    May 28, 2005
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    Just Pre-Judging

    Hm...a little hard to follow based on grammatics. Still a cute story behind it. The biggest trouble with this work is that you tend to get ahead of yourself and forget that a reader won't know everything that's going on. I would suggest going through and being more specific about things like their talk on the flight home, or how the girl or dragon looked. I mean, I can't even tell you what the landscape is like because you mention it only sparingly. Leaving out a bit of detail is great for the imagination, but I fear you've gone overboard with that aspect and left the story with much need of description and such. Mostly, I'd like to see this work explained a little more. I mean, I can't feel what the characters are feeling; I can't see what they are seeing; I can't imagine what's going through their heads....that sort of thing.

    Now don't get angry or remove this from the contest just yet, but I have to do my "grading" and critiquing now.

    PG-18...Yes...10/10
    Opt. List...No...0/10
    Grammaticks...Mediocre...5/10
    Comment Box...Yes...10/10
    Missing Apples...No...0/10
    Comprehension...Mediocre...10/10
    Proof of Rules...Yes...10/10
    Story...Yes...10/10
    Per...Good...15/20
    TOTAL...70

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