superman

i look into the eyes of my loved ones but at last i got killed by the burgler who helled my famly hostage he wanted our money and the house but he was going to shot my wife and the kids but before he was about to fire the police came then he shot me instead my screamed no! the kids cried and the horror they saw when that awful man shot me but i never lost hope i had something in me and needed letting out casue i am superman! son stop playing around its tea time ok mum no one believed me that i saw something nast night i was outside looking at the stars till a bright light appeared and told me you look behind you where is it then he injected me with something to be surprised i awoke in bed ow what happened we dont know we just found you lying on the grass and you were passed out so we brang you here and put you in bed and you cut your self when you fell or something but there was something else but not sure what it was that voice and the light doesn't make any sence to me at all so for the next three weeks i went back out side then a scream came out of no where i was changing what's happeneing to me then i ran as fast as i can to the scene of the crime but nothing there so looking around with my vision i can see where people are but something was behind me what the i was unconsious but not sure where in was going. continued..

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  • Arch14
    March 25
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    very nice

    good story

    beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 5, ending: 4, dialog: 4, characters: 4.