Valentine's day was the day that we met 1
I know that I never will forget2
that glint in your eyes 3
the first time I looked 4
and from that day on 5
I knew I was hooked6
I know our first meeting 7
was never by chance 8
on that wonderful day 9
that was filled with romance 10
God must have arranged it 11
From his heaven way above 12
he took two lonely heart's13
and he filled them with love 14
That love grew and blossomed 15
out further a field 16
And the fruit of our love17
We both soon would yield 18
So two turned to three 19
and with love ever sweet 20
we welcomed the patter 21
of two tiny feet 22
Soon three turned to four 23
Then four into five 24
And bonded in love25
Our family would thrive 26
But our total so far? 27
its a staggering nine 28
and it’s traceable back 29
to dear St Valentine 30
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Comments
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I'm not really the type to enjoy the usual 'sappy romance' poems, but this one had quite a nice feel to it. I especially liked that you focused on the effects of having meet on Valentine's Day - that it wasn't just about two people falling in love - that it was - for them - the start to a life of happy family life. Overall, it was a rather sweet poem illustrating the things that are best treasured in life, rather than just some simple romantic moment.
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This is really sweet, it's one of those poems that doesn't have any special rhyme scheme or anything remarkable about it, but the final line ties it together so well you can't help but love it :] I could feel the message of this was really sincere, and I love how you made the day St. Valentine was brutally murdered into a romantic day that even made me, the ultimate St. Valentine's skeptic, smile.
I found just one mistake, in line 13, where it should be hearts instead of heart's. Otherwise mistake-free and beautiful! -
I'm smiling
I do love this one. It was sooo sweet. And I can truly see this happening. Good clean write. Flows well. Totally understandable and I can relate to it. Good job. -
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Thank's trekkgirl
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