Dear St Valentine

Valentine's day was the day that we met 1

I know that I never will forget2

that glint in your eyes 3

the first time I looked 4

and from that day on 5

I knew I was hooked6

I know our first meeting 7

was never by chance 8

on that wonderful day 9

that was filled with romance 10

God must have arranged it 11

From his heaven way above 12

he took two lonely heart's13

and he filled them with love 14

That love grew and blossomed 15

out further a field 16

And the fruit of our love17

We both soon would yield 18

So two turned to three 19

and with love ever sweet 20

we welcomed the patter 21

of two tiny feet 22

Soon three turned to four 23

Then four into five 24

And bonded in love25

Our family would thrive 26

But our total so far? 27

its a staggering nine 28

and it’s traceable back 29

to dear St Valentine 30

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  • tallblondie gold member
    March 12

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    I'm not really the type to enjoy the usual 'sappy romance' poems, but this one had quite a nice feel to it. I especially liked that you focused on the effects of having meet on Valentine's Day - that it wasn't just about two people falling in love - that it was - for them - the start to a life of happy family life. Overall, it was a rather sweet poem illustrating the things that are best treasured in life, rather than just some simple romantic moment.


  • Indistrict Cullen
    February 15

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    This is really sweet, it's one of those poems that doesn't have any special rhyme scheme or anything remarkable about it, but the final line ties it together so well you can't help but love it :] I could feel the message of this was really sincere, and I love how you made the day St. Valentine was brutally murdered into a romantic day that even made me, the ultimate St. Valentine's skeptic, smile.

    I found just one mistake, in line 13, where it should be hearts instead of heart's. Otherwise mistake-free and beautiful!


  • trekkergirl
    February 8

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    I'm smiling

    I do love this one. It was sooo sweet. And I can truly see this happening. Good clean write. Flows well. Totally understandable and I can relate to it. Good job.