The fluorescent-like moonlight was reflected in the soft glimmer of her eyes, as I caught up with her between the cedars. As we entered the cluster of trees, the moon disappeared behind the tree branches and the clouds. I knew she was looking straight at me in the dark, not wavering for a second. I, on the other hand, was nervous and uncomfortable enough for the both of us. I couldn’t seem to remember how we got here from my street, but somehow that didn’t matter anymore. Still panting for breath, I forced myself to meet her eyes. I knew I shouldn’t have done that, but to hell with logic. I couldn’t see much of the rest of her face. Her scent was very distinguishable, though. Sweet, vaguely perfumed, and with that definite personal tinge that makes everybody smell different. Something that was hers and hers alone.
She tugged at my arm, motioning me to move closer. My legs were still wobbly from the long chase, and I halfway stumbled into her arms. The soft mounds of her breasts were pressed against mine. I tried to pretend that the feeling didn’t affect me, but that failed miserably. A desperate craving to feel the weight of her breasts in my hands came over me. Her breath was warm and sugary, flowing out from her mouth and over my face each time she exhaled. Without a word, as if she had read my thoughts, she took my hand and placed it over her left breast. Instinctively, I cupped my palm and fingers to fit the soft round shape. Her nipple hardened under her bra and top as I began to stroke it softly. I knew it must be very sensitive, so I made sure I was as careful as I could. Her breathing deepened, and I felt her heart race away. My lips were drawn towards the pulsating heat of the skin on her neck. She tasted as sweet as she smelled, as if someone had painted her all over with watery honey. As I kissed her there, I felt small wet droplets in the unruly short hairs on the nape of her neck. She must be perspiring a little from the long run. The hair itself was tied up in a messy knot on the back of her head, although some strands were loose in the front, framing her face. Of course I couldn’t see that in the dark, but I had noticed it earlier before we decided to go outside.
I was halfway expecting her to push me away, now that she knew she could have me if she wanted to. That was how she treated most of the guys who tried to score with her. However, she made no sign of wanting to do that with me. Instead, her hands slid down my sweaty back to my bum, kneading it through my thin skirt. I felt the familiar tingling sensation between my legs as my folds swelled and my juices began to flow inside of me, slowly trickling out. My underwear started to feel almost rough against my lips, teasing them every time I moved my thighs against each other. I knew she was aware of everything I felt, just like I knew she was experiencing the same.
She pushed me up against one of the thick tree trunks and then lifted my skirt. I felt light-headed with desire. She squatted in front of my legs, pried them apart, and began to kiss on the inside of my right ankle. The feeling of the cool night air gently breezing over my hot warmth caused me goose bumps that began to spread over my skin. I both longed for and dreaded the moment she would reach my most private parts, because I felt embarrassed over how wet I knew I must be. Every second her mouth moved closer and closer, and I felt myself contract within in anticipation. Then suddenly she pulled my panties aside, and soon I felt her lips touching mine in a very wet kiss. I call it a kiss, because she was tasting me, sucking on me and pushing her tongue in between my lips, just as if it had been a “real” kiss. She licked me there, wanting to savour all of my nectar, burying her face in me. I felt her tongue teasing my most sensitive spot. It flicked back and forth over my slippery gem, causing my legs to tremble and twitch. They wanted to fold underneath me. It felt so incredibly good, and even better because I knew I shouldn’t be doing it. Quiet moans began to escape me, and that only made her lick faster and faster. Her hands were on my breasts, squeezing them. There was no stopping it; like a river flooding with the thawed mountain snow in spring. Two of her fingers pushed into me, rubbing inside of me as I contracted on them. I wanted to squeeze them harder and harder and it frustrated me that I couldn’t do it. Yet every time I tried to, my belly muscles cramped up with pleasure. I felt myself being surged into my own passion, beginning to explode inwards while frantically pressing myself down on her face and hand. I squeezed my eyes shut and moaned in ecstasy with my mouth wide open. I knew I must be looking pretty stupid like that but I didn’t care, and I couldn’t have helped it even if I had wanted to.
As my eruption began to subside, she softened her touch to a gentle caress. She got up on her feet so as to be able to kiss my pebble-like nipples, knowing they were literally aching to be sucked on. I think that was the exact moment when I found myself; the woman I truly am. It was as if I had lost my virginity all over again, but for real this time. I tried to think of a way to convey this to her, but she hushed me with a kiss and pointed at the pink and orange in the horizon; dawn. When she pulled my soaked panties back in place I shuddered from the feeling of how cold they were against my skin, probably because of the chill in the air that now was caught in the moist textile. I took her hand in mine and kissed it. She was my goddess now, and I was going to start worshipping her properly as soon as we got inside my door!
Author notes
Purely extracted from the deepest corners of my mind...
What did you think? Please comment!
Comments
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lovely lovely lovely...i love the girl on girl action...and all the emotions and feelings. Excellent voice, really. I love this story...makes me want to go find a girl and see if it really feels like this 
XoXo
NiKKi -
amazing.. i love it that it was two girls.. it made the story interesting, and soo beautiful. amazing write! good luck in the contest! peace
jess -
Wow. Another amazing write. I'm not one for girl on girl stuff (I'm too fascinated by men to be interested in girls), but it was so sexy it didn't matter! You did an excellent job writing this, drawing the reader into the story until they feel like they're actually there, being pleasured by the "goddess". Awesome job!!! Good luck in contest!
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Very hot! I especially liked the description of the feelings (which, for me, separates the good erotica from the mediocore).
I didn't know you were writing about two women, either, until well into the beginning of the piece. I think it would be more powerful, really, if you let the reader in on this from the start. -
I have been getting an eyeful of ladies going at it and I'm telling you that it makes me down right horny! Kepp it cuming!
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Ted E. -
wonderful. I couldn't tell it was two women until you mentioned the skirt... I've been looking around trying to find some really descriptive stuff (because i'm trying to learn how to write it) and I've certainly found it here. Good luck in the contest.
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This was truly passionate! What guy doesn't enjoy watching the ladies, I know it turns me on. Good luck in the contest. Mmmmmmmm Good is how I feel about it!
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This is great! It really surprised me when I realized that it was about two women! Great write! Lace
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I love the background- The kanji Ai for love. Brilliant. I love the way you slowly revealed that it was two women, that was excellently done! Very nice story you have here!
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This was really good, when i started reading this, i had no idea that it was two women..wow
Thanks for entering and good luck
Tammy
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All the best things in life end too soon
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well u get brownie points for girl on girl lol but i would haveliked it to have been longer. great write and good luck in my contest! mwa mua
Eve
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Lol, its a good thing the maker of this contest is a lesbian. You should score big for that one not to mention this story is amazing let alone the erotica. Intoxication in every motion. Good luck in the contest.
MAD -
That was very, very, very beautiful. I loved the descriptions, it was extremely well-written, and everything was so ... aestethic (sp?). It's a really lovely description of these 2 women finding each other, I especially love the last line - "She was my goddess now, and I would start to worship her properly once we got inside my door!" Very lascivious. Overall, a wonderful story.
~Laura -
Actually this isn't that bad. Very well written. Please don't forget to say which two works you commented on. Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest.
*~OD~* -
lesbians? eh, to each his own. nice write and good luck in the contest!
Shana
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Yeah, short stories are fine. You've definetely got a very captivated ( ) audience here! At the beginning, I was surprised that the two lovers were same sex, but then I read the title and then it became the obvious! This is one of the few different pieces in the contest so far, good luck and thanks for entering!
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Wow, I'm going to go take a cold shower now. Great story.
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mind blowing
LOL, as I'm sure you have already heard, I think you did a great job here. I love the backgrounds so much!!!!! I loved your story, it was different and very creative, and I liked your descriptive words, very vivid, the ending was perfect, excellent job! lol
Irilis -
THAT. WAS. GORGEOUS!!!
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outs:: I want a girlfriend...
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I have to second that OOOOHHHHHHHH MMMMYYYYY GOOOODD up there! WOW! Great work with detail! Great write! I love that! Thx for entering! Good Luck .........Sheila
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A masterpiece!!
Very beautiful. This was like a classic symphony being played right before my eyes. I really envy the sensuality of two women together. There is a depth of love and sensitivity that most if
not all men will never experience. Anyways,this was a great work of art. A real masterpiece. Thanks so much for the journey!
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oh yes yes yes, you can say you made it up i don't care you took me there and it was real enough for me!! oh damn where's a wet tongue when you need one....brilliant piece of erotic literature, wish i could claim this sexperience as my own!
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Wow, that was a show of some great imagination there lol. Im shocked lol. WELL DONE!! Me and my freind were both sitting here reading it lol, and even she liked it. I love the imagery and just all the "texture" you put into this. Pleas keep up the good work and good luck in my contest
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my favorite part was... "as if someone had painted her all over with watery honey"
nice work, sweet and combustible. ..
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mercy me!
hmmm....
one needs a cold shower after this!
thos dark secrets that somehow touch within the corners
of one's mind!
Enjoyed!
Keep penning on!
Bill -
fantasies of our inner most dark kept secrets
my body moistened in delight of this read
erotic, I don't think so
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Wow...
I wonder how many women are keeping these fantasies in the hidden corners of their minds? Very sensual. I am lost for any more words.
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this makes me wish i was a women so that i could *more* fully appreciate being a lesbian(as i am one just trapped in a mans body...i would rather use a dildo than have sex)
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Exceptional
You definitely have the magic touch. This was an exceptional piece of writing. I think your skills with the pen can easily leap into any genre you wish. I look forward to more, and more of your writings.
Well done.
John -
OHHHHHH....MYYY GOOODDDDDD!!!!!!
Damn!!
I was so caught up, I felt I was loosing myself ther efor a minute.
Very good writing.
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Holy shit this is passionate and hot. Wow! What an amazing erotic memory. I wouldn't give it two thumbs up though (middle fingers are much more gentle and pleasurable).
I give it two tongues up, way up. hahahahahaha
Awesome!
Marcellus -
It don't get expressed much better than this, I'm with Joey, Holy Moly!
You know your average male is going to just eat this up, after it's read!
Meaning, who knows, LOL... Your too much Jen, you need to write for some erotic Mag. for sure, I'm sure you'd do just fine making a living! Heehee!
Should I thank you for writing this, yes ofcourse, why not...LOL!
I think you one this hands down, Two Thumbs Up, Way Up! ~Smiles~
Wonderfully Written! *Cheers*
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mmm..sexy. it made me wet. hehe :] but yeah this is quite good. you captured the moment if i do say so myself
<3
destiny
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I can truly appreciate the sensuality in this ...the hesitation you felt at first and then the complete surrender . This could apply to homo or heterosexual and is a great erotic write . Good luck in the contest :0
Reenie
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Heh I am glad you all liked it, never did anything like this
before Thanks!
Jen
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My god .. Crimson, this is absolutely AMAZING ..
My hearts still racing after reading this .. I found my eyes moving faster and faster, at a frenzied pace, over the words, as if I couldn't wait to taste each one! I think that women can really appreciate this .. and it could be written only by a woman's mind, really .. because you have every sweetly erotic thing that men don't even consider .. they don't understand the way it feels to have otherwise soft fabric against your most sensitive and aroused skin, like sandpaper .. the way you just writhe to feel something smooth and warm against the wet skin .. gah .. now I'm still very .. lost in thought hehe ..
ANYWAY - thank you soooo much for entering this into my contest, it is absolutely amazing!! I don't think I'll be forgetting it any time soon!! -
Holy freaking MollY
me ohh myy I knew, I knew I shant of read this LOL, OK this was amazingly hot and steamy it rolled with immediacy of thought and the intensity of reality, and whats scary is this scene for me, is more a nightmare in my own mind rather than a dream, yet it was incredibly emmmmm arousing Damn Jen you write some steamy sensual erotica, this is most certainly an impeccably penned and emotively sensual write, no matter what the subject, it was beautifully done sweety
kudos for an incredibly brave heart to even spill out thoughts swirling in the deepest recesses of our minds, your a brave soul,
kindest regards and love to yas as always,
joe -
Jen
Oh me, oh my
Yes, this is definetely erotica, and I'm not lesbian or anything, but, I was caught up in this fantasy, very hot
It does make the mind wonder............
Best of luck in the contest
Karen
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Extracted most fully. Definately Erotica.
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