HI my name is Kiara, and if you didn't know already, i am the faerie princess of a place called Sussex.1
It is a kingdom located in a weeping willow tree. When you hear the word "Weeping Willow" u think "wow this must be a sad little place." But our home is now different from any other faerie land.2
Now that you know about my beautiful kingdom, let me tell you a little about my dysfunctional family. My father's name is King Lars, and my Mom is Queen Kiona.But the worst person in my family is my sister Tibby. Tibby the pixie. Yeah that's right. You heard me. My sister is a stupid pixie! She is what has caused the turmoil in my life.3
In just a few days I was planning to get married to my one true love jasper. This Spring was going to be the crowning of the new King and Queen. Who ever was the first of the daughters to get married would be the new leaders of the land. And since Tibby wasn't so good with faerie or pixie guys it would be me and my new husband. 4
So while i was writing my wedding vows and admiring my dress. Guess who comes in. Trashy Tibby herself. She was yelling and screaming in a jealous rage. She said something about doing everything in her power to destroy my wedding, and if you know anything about pixies then I am sure you know they don't have any strength to control a thing.5
Not thinking anything of it, i ignored her endless babble, and walked down stairs to enjoy a family dinner. Since everyone was talking about the big day, it took a while to realize Tibby wasn't amongst us at dinner. We all just thought she was out with one of her many boyfriends. That was until we smelled smoke.6
Worried about the welfare of our people we ran out to see what was going on, just to find Tibby burning up my wedding dress. There I saw my gorgeous white beaded dress in flames. So rushed over in a panic and tried to stomp out the flames only to find ruined remains took twenty four hours to redesign it. 7
The following day was the wedding. While i was all ready with my renewed dress on, and my flowered head piece on with my auburn curls flowing down my back, I decided I didn't want Tibby getting in the way. So i tied her up to a tree branch and left her there.8
The ceremony was going great. But when Paster Pooka asked if any one objected to the marriage, in came Tibby. She was screaming insults and untrue rumors at me and my beloved. Luckily the Security trolls came and took her away. 9
That evening Jasper and I were crowned the new King and Queen of Sussex. But as for Tibby... well she is working as a servant in the poor town of Pixiville, far far away from our rich land.10
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this is a story about a fairie who's pixie sister tries to destroy her from her wedding.
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I agree with Ibar, the first person was quite amusing, just as the rest of the story. thank you.
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that was an amusing write! Loved how you wrote it all out like that doing it in first person! It was funny and great!
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ur funny... she was mean and only cared about her self
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Ah give Tibby another chance ... she just needed your attention
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Just to inform you childern are a lot smarter than you think and will question about that, along with everything else :/ seems that's all they do. As for using my imagination I don't think that the correct term. If you leave gaps in the story that's your fault, you don't need to blame the reader for questioning. Please remember that you did ask for critical comments and that's exactly what I'm trying to give. Oh, and never tell someone that you entered their contest because of boredom and trophie hunting. lol, it doesn't make them feel special anymore. *tear*
Anyway good luck in the contest.
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well maybe the pixie was adopted. it is a faerie tale. come on use ur imagination. i used mine to write the story ok? it's not a big deal. i am sure a 5 year old wouldnt sit her and question me. i just entered it cuz i was bored and looking for trophies.
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Be careful about grammar. HI should be Hi. i should be I. u should be you. Capitilize names, jasper should be Jasper.
How can you have a sister that a pixie if everyone else is a faerie? Also if its a faerie land why would a pixie even geta chance at running it?
Reading through this story I found it to be very cute, but you probably want to add more detail and stuff to this to make it a complete story. This would make a great childerns story
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I love it. Lol, i have a thing for faeries and yeah..cuz my name means queen of the faeries. so yeah..awesome story..
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