Hearts,broken chipping at each part,1
Blood falling like a needle prick on your finger,2
Souls numb frozen with pain,3
Roses dying, as they tear the skin with their thorns,4
Tears falling from your eyes,5
Like diamond clenching hands,6
Not wanting to tell the truth,7
Hiding your secrets,8
Not showing your feelings,9
Sorrow,Pain,Regret,10
Tears,Crying over nothing,11
Why should you tell?.12
Nobody will listen,13
Nobody will even care.14
What did you think? Please comment!
Comments
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wow, dis is such a gr8 rite. xcuse me 4 not ritin nythin critical or owt. am pretty shit at riting comments. but i fink dis is truely beautiful. like josie sed, lovin ur use of metaphors. dont fail 2 keep up the work. xxx
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thankyou
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Your use of metaphors is exceptional. The ryhthm of this piece was wonderful. I really loved the depth and dark beauty of this work. I know it is supposed to be sad and angry, but sometimes even those can be beautiufl.
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Wow. This is deep, and I like it a lot. Great write. Keep up the amazing work.
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