Bean Nighe dreaded and feared1
Washed my beloved’s shirt one night2
She bent over the rocks 3
And dipped in the cloth4
A steady, rhythmic in and out5
I had walked to the river6
Though my love was to come7
But I chanced upon the Bean Nighe8
She sang to me…9
Though it was for him10
“So do leing, so do leine ga mi higheadh.”11
“It is your shirt, your shirt that I am washing.”12
I stood in horror13
And watched in fascination14
Again and again a rock she used15
A glance from the Bean Nighe16
Sent me running for home 17
For the light and the warmth I crave18
When I stumbled and lurched 19
And fell upon 20
My own true love’s still form21
Laying in his soaked stained shirt22
No more. No more.23
Author notes
Bean Nighe is the Scottish version of the Irish Bean Sidhe or Banshee. But it is considered a fey.
Tranfer from AP
'Awakening'
In a list
A contest entry
- Gipsies or Banshees by Darkhearted.
145 points, ended June 21, 4 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Very interesting. I like the way you wrote this. Good luck in the contest!
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Thanks for the explination in your AN. I had a feeling of what it was about but you kept me intrigued right untill I finished reading. Your imagery and emotion was wonderful. This couldn't be better. Well done.
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Thanks for the read and I'm glad you liked it. I'm not much of a poet, but sometimes I try.
Again thanks
Brooke
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loved the imagery and the wording... Great write
cheyenne
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Thanks for reading. When writing this and doing research, it was said that if you chance upon the Bean Nighe, she or it would be washing the shirt of her/his next victim.
Again thanks for the read.
Brooke
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whoa that was a total turn that what i expected. Very well written me likey! kinda creepy too. Makes you shiver a bit. brrr! lovelye language and imagery. kudos!
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Thanks for the reading
And I'm glad you liked it.
Brooke
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Wow~ it's great! I know this goes against my usual comments(and my commitment to SAR) but I really can't think of anything wrong with it, other than the 4th line lacks a little bit. The wording is a little off, maybe...
anyways great work
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This was like a story in short form. You did really well with it cause as i read it i added all the fillers automatically.
Another great write! I enjoy reading your work!
Rian,
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Thanks so much for the reads. I don't normally write poetry, but I figured I'd give it a try.
Scottish lore is very interesting
Again thanks
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You're very welcome
I don't usually read poetry either, but recently have been trying to. 
You make it enjoyable so thanks for letting me read your work.
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