Tested

She looks up from the ground that she lay's on. Cold she gets as the blood drains out of her body "I told you i'd do it you tested me" she hears as a faint and a blure of vision as she slowly dies away."Tested thats all it was, tested" as I looked down at her. Let me take you back to where it all started.1

May 1 2007, one of the coldest days on earth for me. To all I seem like a quiet boy who looks scene but to Gordan i'm the hottest guy ever. Gordan's a girl in my class she's pretty shes black more like a warm carmel welcomeing color. Her hair used to be long but she got it cut short to go more with her skater girl look. Her eyes are as dark and starey as mine. Her skinny jeans and her T-shirts plain and simple for the eyes to please. She's a red converse, I'm a Van.2

I am just the lead guitarest in my High school band. I'm white and I where skinny jeans and T-shirts. The most exsiting thing about me would have to be my hair, short in the back and over to the right side in the front. I'm not a nut case but I'm hott.3

It was a long day so far st school meaning i'm only in first period. In the back of my head all i could think of is I know shes waiting............4

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This story is soo great cant wait to finish

when is the auther going to finesh the story?

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  • this is amazing love it
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  • Kagamine Rin
    January 17

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    This is a pretty good start but I suggest watching your grammar and capitalization. Oh, and don't overuse the "..."s. :3.

    The story is extravagant. Can't wait to see more!

  • jeniseanncooper
    January 17
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    This is great so far