"No Drew, that's just going a little far."1
"But I really like her Alex."2
"So, dude she's a teacher."3
"And, that didn't stop you from going out with Ms.Janets."4
"That was differant, mate."5
"Alex, I don't care what you say, I'm telling Ms.Wilkie I like her."6
"Fine, but Drew, don't come running to me when she turns you down."7
As Drew was about to knock Ms.Wilkie's door, she came walking out.8
"Em, Ms.Wilkie can I talk to you."9
"Sure."10
"And in private please."11
Ms.Wilkie took Drew into her classrom and said,12
"Look, Drew I know what you are going to say, and by the way I fancy you to."13
"Well will you go out with me?"14
"Yes." 15
Drew was all pleased with himself as went up to Alex.16
"Hey mate I've got a new girl.17
"Drew, I can't believe you just done that, and do you know what, you're just failiure, and I don't want to know you any more."18
Author notes
I'm only in P7 and am on level F for writing is that good?????
first impressions?
Comments
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It was very short and I dodn't like the ending
beginning: 3, language: 4, plot: 2, ending: 1, dialog: 1, characters: 2.
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