Siuthad

Siuthad1

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by: Mike3

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a tribute to Iseabail and Lachan who had died from a broken heart (lachan had died from hypothermia)5

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Stumbling to my feet, vertigo flushes through me, tainting my soul with an obsidian haze. Alone in my room, I watch the shadows dance around the pale walls trying to eschew the light 'glinting through the partially open blinds. There is nothing to comfort me. I am alone.7

All my thoughts have been absconded from me ~ or at least thoughts that had I cared for about... the only thought to be had was of that night. How you rid yourself of this world for him. Your life, your breath... for fit for your only your true love...'8

'Iseabail had cried the night after Lachan had died. We came to comfort her. Silence was the common tone with chords of howling winds amongst the trees... Iseabail could barely breathe her panting for air, the shivers that shattered her spine like a frozen solid whip. The thought of his death unbearable. We had all fallen a sleep ~all but Iseabail...' 9

in the morning Iseabail was missing.10

A few weeks later, her body was found hanging from a tree in the forest that Lachan had often taken her to. She always said magic had flowed through the sap of the tree. Engraved in the base of the tree was Siuthad, go on ~ something she herself could not do. go on to move on her love was too deep, too strong.'11

A tribute to some of my greatest friends Iseabail and Lachan12

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Siuthad14

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I would like to give a special thanks to paperparadox for all the help on spelling errors and typos thank you very much and thank you for everyone who commented I truly appreciate it 16

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  • J-Dus
    January 16

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    This was a great write. Really depressing, but very well written, there is definete emotion in it. Keep up the great work!!!!

                                                Jade


  • Adelaine
    January 16

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    Touching.

    This is beautiful yet very sad; well-written. It is obviously heartfelt.

    I hope to read more of your works.

    - Adelaine


  • paperparadox
    January 16

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    ...Sad...

    Boy...is this a true story? If it is, then I can see why it came out as a stream-of-consciousness style of write.

    It's very Romeo and Juliet-esque in its tragedy, and I applaud you for getting it down into a story.

    I hope you won't mind, but I can give you some pointers about sharpening up the typos and spelling a bit, making for a much more smooth and effective read.

    I'm guessing you have deliberately not used a capital letter to begin your paragraphs, but since I note you used them for the first letter of some of your sentences, I will even them out for you:

    Para 7: 'stubbling (stumbling) to my feet, vertigo flushes through me(,) tinting (~? do you mean tainting?) my soul with an obsiden (obsidian) haze. Alone in my room(,) (I watch the) shadows dancinging (dance) around the pale walls trying (to) eschew the light gisting (~ do you mean 'glinting'?) through the parcally (partially) open blinds. there (There) was nothing( there is nothing to comfort me(.) i (I) was alone(.) all (All) my thoughts had [been] absconded from me (~) or at least thoughs (thoughts) that had i (I) cared for (about)... the only thoght (thought) to be had was of that night. how (How) you forbid (rid?) yourself of this world for him. Your life(,) your breath(...) forfit for your only love( your true love...'

    Para 11: 'Iseabail had cryind (cried in?) the night after Lachan had died(.) we (We) came to comfort her. silence (Silence) was the common tone with chords of howling winds amngst (amongst) the trees... Iseabail could barly (barely)breathe( her panting for air(,) the shivers that shatted (shattered) her spine like a frozen solid wip (whip)(.) the (The) thought of his death unbareable (unbearable)(.) we (We) had all fallen a sleep (~)all but Iseabail...' (only three dots for an elipsis)

    Para 13: in the morning Iseabail was missing. a (A) few weeks later(,) her body was found hanging from a tree in the forest that Lachan had offten (often) taken her (to). She always said magic had flowed through the sap of the tree. ingraved (Engraved) in the base of the tree was( (Put this quote in italics) siuthad (Siuthad), go on (~) somthing (something) she her self (herself) could not do(.) go on to move on her love (was) too deep(,) to (too) strong.'

    This last sentence isn't quite clear in its meaning, so I've only helped witht he spelling and punctuation where I can.

    Well done, nevertheless. This is a brave write, judging by what I see here.



    I hope you haven't minded me stopping by with this comment.
    Keep up the good work!