Elissa silently crept down the stairs and out the front door. Careful not to wake her mother and step dad. Once safely outside the house she let out a deep sigh a dragged her feet as she continued down the side walk to school.1
This was a day like any other she knew, except for once she had managed to get out of the house without waking her light sleeping step father. She wore black converse shoes, black jeans, a black t-shirt, and long black arm wwarmers. Yep, just another day... in a living hell.2
For most kids just another day would be just that. A boring day at school followed by going home to annoying siblings and parents. But for Elissa, everyday was torture. And this day was no different.3
SHe went over what her day would hopefully be like as she walked through the school doors. She would go to school, take the teasing and namecalling, then silently sulk home and creep upstarirs into her quiet room, do her homework, go downstairs, cook supper, getting yelled at maybe get chased back up stairs and then lock herself in her room and cry herself to sleep. In a day of Elissas' life, this was a good day.4
THE day went slowly, torturously slow, when finally the last bell rang. Elissa quickly grabbed her things and slipped out the door all in one smooth motion. THE next thing she knew she was at her locker listening to the calls of "emo" and "loser" and "freak". She sighed, another day. God help me. if there even is a god...5
She threw her back pack on hung her head and sulked down the stairs and out the door onto the sidewalk. As she walked, she lingered in town, not quite ready to go home. Today hadn't been to much out of the ordinary, but she was sure her luck wouldn't last at home. THEn suddenly, like a nightmare, she was home.6
SHe qietly stepped throught the front door, but before she could reach the stairs something hard hit her in the back of the head.7
"Oof!" she gasped, knowing what came next.8
"Why are you so fucking late?! Huh?!"9
She didn't give her time to anser. the next thing Elissa knew her mother was standing in front of her, face red.10
"WEll!? Thats what I thought! You were probably with some boy werent you? Is that mosre important than your chores. I think not!"11
A hard blow landed across Elissa cheek- "oww!" she yelped in pain adn fell to the ground. 12
" GEt your lazy ass up! you're lucky Steve isn't here yet or he'ed really have it in for you! Now get making supper or you'll still be waiting for his punishment when he gets here, Ill make sure of that!"13
Elissa scrambled to her feet. By now she was used to her mothers harsh words and beeatings, but she was not used to the cruelty of her mothers boyfriend STeve. So she hurredly made supper and slipped upstairs safely unnoticed before he got home. 14
Once up in her room, Elisa layed face down on her bed and sobbed. Today had not been what she hoped. After about 15 minutes of crying she weakly got off her bed, she hadn't eaten since lunch the day before. She had spent lunch today in the bathroom hiding from the other kids. So she was qiute weak and light headed by now, She made her way to her mirror, where she found a black eyed reflection staring back at her. Great, she thought, One more thing I have to hide. She sulked back to her bed and layed down, to exhausted to even inflict self harm. She had endured enough pain, afterall, for one day. So she layed there and wept,until she fell into a dreamless slumber.
How did I do?
Comments
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AWESOME!!!
beginning: 5, language: 4, plot: 3, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 4.
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I call second!
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thats really good
i really enjoyed it!
i cant wait til you write more
cause i will be the first one to read it!


