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So what do you think, should I continue it?
What did you think? Please comment!
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awww i see what you mean! I might go back later and prolong that part...
I think this was more of me getting my thoughts down you know?
Thanks SOOOO much for your helpful but kind comment,
Melissa -
i think this really has the potential to go somewhere exciting. when i said straightforward i meant that the initial explanation of why she was upset was laid out already, that was fine, but then when she was reunited with the guy from school it all seemed to move very fast. He told her straight away that his wife left him and she told him about her boyfriend, the next thing we know they're already arranging to go to dinner. But I can't wait to watch this story unfold!
~tara -
It's so real. Great job with this. I think you mighta made a typo up there, but I could have just read it wrong?
"Krista got down on her knees and **Josh** wrapped his tiny fist around Krista's hand."
But yeah, I'd continue it. It's developing really well, and you can't just leave us hanging!!!
Sarah
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Thanks so much! What do you mean by straightfoward? I am going to put twists and turns in this that will be hard to catch until they happen if that is the problem.
I REALLY appreciate you reading this!
melissa -
hmm... well... its very straightforward, which i wasnt too sure about from the start. however i do like the idea and if you continued i would certainly read it. nice work.
~tara
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