Rain Dance

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p d r o p1


drip drop
drop drip drip
drip drop
drip2

rain seeps down the ice metal rail of the window3

dull red veins throb over eyeballs4

eyes open to dank dark room and to the wall5

It is seven thirty6

pains in ur foot back and head 7

are already working their voodoo8

dressed and not remembering how9

hot tears fall in time of impeding shower10

far off laughter and jeers wash over lowered hood11

painful ringing of bells, long lecture of nothing worth knowing12

short empty tasteless lunch alone in a circus of actors13

cold next to the wall 14

tired ready for home15

dreamy walk home16

it early and books wont be opened for a while17

aching back lies down against the welcoming warm mattress18

promises of other world and love await19

sirens blare unheard under the ambiance of oncoming rain20

drip drop drip
drop drop drip
drip drop d
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Author notes

i'm in a real bad mood. Depressed if you will. I haven't felt like this in a awhile. I scared the crap out of my friends. Cause i'm the strong one who won't let anything get to her. except to day it did. I feel so lost and tired. Oh, well.

fah...twilight is amazing except ppl who hate it*

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  • ice wolf Greeters member
    March 29

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    this is a bit of a depressing poem, but it's beautifully written. Great job. I really like how you tied the rain in with what I read in as tears. Great writing and keep penning.
    Ruth


  • try2changeme
    January 14

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    it so good... theres depression in that, and theres no other way to describe it.. and i cant say its the best like, story. but with the details and way you wrote it.. it was wonderful.. congrats


  • Amaylisse
    January 13

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    I love how you arranged the words 'drip and drop' in an interesting way. It really gave your poem a good impact. Just a reminder you may want to proofread that. I can feel in your poem that you are depressed and I can understand that too, because I also have my depression moments. Powerful moods can make poems so good!


  • TNTrouble
    January 13

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    *hugs* I do understand and relate to this poem as well. Tis lovely how you laid it out...the actual arraingment of words and letters. Again I hope that you get to feeling better soon.