You just cannot explain it. 1
The lengths we go for the simplest of things; 2
Laisser faire to what really matters. 3
The subjective nature of what matters, 4
Such a nature is in steady transition, 5
Constant flux. 6
Our desires, our whims, change like the weather,7
Often as gloomy. 8
Eternal overcast; 9
Sunny spells forewarning of storms to come. 10
Drizzle, firm winds; 11
Our skin sallow and grey like the souls they contain. 12
Our gaze ensconced on the sky, 13
We have little chance of escaping our circular nature, 14
Catch 22 existences which we harbour; 15
Embrace exquisitely, 16
Romance the pain and drink its coagulated by-product.17
Once implacable, we are now Stepford Wives; 18
Our times have come and gone. 19
It is too late; we have lost the battle.20
Our major malfeasance is not hatred, 21
Nor is it extremism; 22
Our lackadaisical existence is apathy. 23
Such a word was foreign and benign, 24
Now it’s our religion, 25
Our political affiliation, 26
Our comrade, our whore; 27
It will ride us nonchalantly into orgasmic obscurity. 28
Standards lowered, expectations nullified,29
Sensory experiences limited, 30
We embark on the downfall of man,31
Minds too bloated on cellebratyisim, 32
Greed, ignorance and comfort familiarity.33
Where will our spiritual peregrination will take us,34
Do we care?35
TV keeps us cemented with its cathartic demon seamen. 36
Popular culture impregnates us; 37
We give birth to its child, 38
Broadcast Incubus succubus. 39
We are proud of our creation, 40
Like a rape victim who falls for their assailant, 41
Like the kidnapped defending the kidnapper. 42
We raise the spawn as our own 43
The cycle continues.44
Our desires, our dreams, our conscience, 45
Effortlessly manipulated, 46
Re-programmed by Zionist sources. 47
Our lands are polluted in rhythm with our minds.48
Hearts and minds, hearts and minds, 49
Decay from the inside out, 50
Rot as they feed the pockets of the network. 51
The network owns, the network becomes us,52
We are the network.53
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Comments
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I think you meant 'seamen' as 'semen' up there, but I could be wrong. (since you were using specific words as symbolism.)
You start reading this poem not knowing what to expect, then you gradually start to get it as you read. I like that in a poem. You've got a few references that I couldn't make reference to (specifically the Stepford Wives, sine I know nothing about that,) but that doesn't detract from the poem any.
What I like the most in this piece is the symbolism. It leaves it open to so much interpretation.
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It's really good
I do like this. But isn't it spelled "Laissez Faire"? I do believe that it is. I just want to help with the flow. It interrupted my reading, ever so slightly. Nonetheless, it lessened the effect this piece had on me. Still, it is very good. Maybe you could base some future work off of this, maybe write about someone who is trying to break the ties they have to this 'network' in which they have become incorporated?
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Very interesting.
I like the piece, it is very deep and a tad depressing, but none the less true.
People watching celeb big brother being a very scary case in point.
Very well written.
All the best.
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