Chapter 1- 1
It’s funny how things seem to work out. One moment your walking home, threw a deserted ally, then the next moment your facing a stranger in what could be a battle to the death. It is just a normal day for me.2
I’m Angel Hawthorn and your normal 17 year old looking demon. Well, right now I look human; due to the fact I’m trying to live a normal human life. I have blond hair that’s put into a ponytail with my bangs framing my face and emerald eyes. I normally wear my black cargos with silver chains on them and my red short sleeve hoodie.3
Unfortunately, living in a town with wer-animals and vampires don’t make my life easier. The vampires and were/animals are completely unobvious to our presence here and that’s how we like it. However, as fat would have it, there have been killings and even though the werewolves in the town are trying to find out which vampires killed the humans, its not working. This is where the demons come in thanks to the fact that the werewolves can’t catch the vampires.4
Unlike werewolves, we demons have powers. Not all of our powers are the same, but we at least have two each. I am a rare combo of fire and high telekinesis power. I can attack with both, yet I can also defend. Not only do we have our “special” powers but we also have our “normal” powers. These powers are our strength, fangs, claws, sensitive hearing, and our sensitive smell.5
Right now I was standing in front of a new born vampire, maybe a week old or so. He wouldn’t be too hard to take out. I’m not one of the demons who was assigned to hunt down the vampires, but if one gets in my way I was going to kill it, or at least hurt it.6
“Ohh…a human girl! Nice, ripe, and tender!” The vampire said flashing his fangs “Why don’t you come over here.”7
I started walking as if his dazzling powers were actually working on me. Demons aren’t affected by dazzling. That is what makes us better for hunting them then the werewolves are. I smirked on the inside as I seen him smirk, thinking he just got a meal. I hate to break it for him, but I was about to fry his sorry butt.8
“That’s a good girl.” The vampire said as I reached him9
He raised his hand and ran a cold finger down my cheek, to my neck. I suppressed the urge to punch him as I felt his sickly sweet breath fan my face. He bent down, his fingers pressing lightly to the base of my throat. I felt his fangs graze my skin and I had to suppress a shutter. I felt his fangs slide out more, preparing to bite my neck.10
I put my left hand on his chest and smirked. I used my telekinesis powers to push him back. He slammed into a wall, his eyes wide with shock. I growled low in my chest as I felt my fangs and claws sharpen. My black ears appeared on the top of my head and my black tail appeared, swishing side to side. I took a step forward, the vampire scampered to the side, his instincts taking over.11
Instincts are what save a lot of lives, even human lives. You see, humans have very dull instincts and so they are easier to pick off. Werewolves and vampires have excellent instincts and often rely on them in a tight situation, like this new born here. However, demons have the highest instincts out of all due to the fact that we have our “wild” side when we transform into our true form.12
“Have you been involved with any of the human killings?” I asked, already knowing the answer13
“N-no! N-no! I s-swear!” The new born vampire stuttered as he moved to the side some14
I could tell he was lying. Not only was it in his eyes, but I could smell it rolling off of him along with fear. Sometimes I loved being who I was.15
“You lie.” I said and stepped closer “Who else was involved?”16
“Umm…” The young vampire said trying to think “I don’t know! I was just giving orders and told to follow them!”17
“Who gave you these orders” I asked growling as I cracked my knuckles slowly18
“I don’t know! He c-came in a c-cloak!” The vampire stuttered “I c-couldn’t see his face!”19
“Oh well then.” I said walking toward him as he scampered backwards20
He turned and ran. I laughed on the inside as I let the feeling of a chase take over. Ever predatory animal, no matter what type they are, have an instinct to chase down their prey as it flees. Demons where no different, but we loved a game of cat and mouse.21
I launched after the vampire, moving swiftly and quietly. I jumped onto a dumpster and then to the roof of a small house. I haven’t had a good chase in a long time and it was exciting to finally be chasing something down.22
He ran into a parking lot and seen no where to hide. I jumped down from the last building and slowly walked toward him. The chains on my pants clinked together as a walked. He turned around to me with fear visible in his eyes. My nostrils flared as I took in the scent.23
“Looks like your at an end.” I said as I stopped and looked to him “Any last wishes?”24
“Do you have any girl?” A dark voice said from behind me25
My instincts took over and I ducked. It was a good thing I did as a hand appeared where my head was. I spun around, swinging my foot in hopes of knocking him down. Unfortunately, he wasn’t. I straightened out and looked around. The young vampire was gone along with the older one. I snarled in frustration. I had let them escape, and now they knew of my existence. This was going to turn out bad, I just knew it was.26
I looked around, to see where I was. I was on the werewolves side of the town, the area where only the rogue vampires go. The vampires that struck a deal with the werewolves stay on the other side of town, the side where I lived at. They only drink animal blood. That’s another reason I haven’t been hunting in a while. If I was out hunting and wasn’t focused on my surroundings, I could get attacked by them. I haven’t met them and to be truthful, I don’t want to.27
I growled in frustration again. Now the rest of my nice evening was going to be crappy. I wouldn’t be able to focus on anything because two vampires knew I existed. I couldn’t allow that. Not only did it put me in danger but it also put my parents pack in danger. I would be kicked out if they found out about this.28
I paced some as I let my demon features disappear. I was trying to think of what I should do. Go home to the pack and tell them what happened, or hunt them down myself. The first choice could mean thrown from the pack and the second choice could possibly mean death. I decided that I would just wait it out, just to see how things would unfold.29
I headed home using my demon speed. It didn’t take long, but I stuck to the shadows so I didn’t get caught. I unlocked the door and slipped in closing it. I was going to need a nice hot bath to calm my nerves. I had to think of what to do. 30
As I drew my water for my bath, I heard a tapping at the front door. I shut the water off and jogged down stairs in nothing but my sports bra and boxer shorts. I opened the door and looked up to see a boy about 17-18. He had black hair with golden eyes. He wore a black shirt with a white long sleeve shirt over it and baggy blue jeans.31
He looked at me and smirked. I could tell he was a vampire, by the way he smelled. He must have been one of them to drink animals because vampires drinking human blood had reddish eyes. I had forgotten what I was in, but I didn’t care. This was my home.32
“Angle Hawthorn correct?” The vampire asked33
“Depends on who’s asking.” I replied leaning on the door frame34
“My father who knows your mother.” The vampire said “My names Tyler Whitefield. My sister, brother, and I are new in town and we have some relatives that live in this area. My dad said you could help us.”35
“Hmmm…I don’t know.” I said “Who are your relatives?”36
“Ginger Palms and Ruko Alps.” Tyler said his breath fanning my face some37
“Um…I suppose I can help you.” I replied “They live in the forest about 5 miles away. There’s a small dirt path just up the rode from here that you can take. You’ll come to a fork in the path and you take a left. The rode will end by their house.”38
“Thank you” Tyler said and turned around walking back to the blue Ferrari sitting in my drive39
I watched as he slide into the driver side and drove off. Then I turned back and jogged up to the bathroom to turn on my bath water. Once it was done I had slipped my clothes off and slide into the warm water. It was a large tub with jets in it. I let the water go to my chin and turn on the jets. They felt good on my tense muscles.40
After my bath, I slipped on my sweats and tank top. I brushed my hair out and braided it down into two pigtails. It was to keep all the knots out. They get on my nerves and it takes me forever to brush them out.41
I sunk on my bed, putting my hands behind my head. I was thinking about what to do when my phone rang. I picked it up and looked at the caller id. It was Jason. Jason is a werewolf who I know. He doesn’t know what I am though, but we’re cool. I flipped the phone up and put it to my ear.42
“Yo Jason what’s up?” I asked yawning some43
“Another killing Angel.” Jason said sounding his normal self44
One thing about Jason, he never cares who gets killed. He just follows orders and make sure their followed. He’s like the second in command, or beta’s as our pack calls them. I’m not sure if they call them selves that, but that’s how we rank them.45
If one of our pack mates die, wer-animals or demons, we seek revenge on the one that killed our pack mates. Vampires, however, may be different. I’m not entirely sure on them. No one really is, but them themselves really.46
“Who was it this time Jason?” I asked yawning some47
“A girl by the name of Jessica Harp.” Jason said48
It sounded like he was shuffling threw some papers on the other end of the line. I couldn’t be sure because it could be static as well.49
“How old was she?” I asked grabbing a pen and note book from my night stand50
I normal kept notes in my note book about the killings. I write down all the information I gather about the killings. I don’t know why I do, but I think that it may come in handy in the near future.51
“She was 24 and was married with a baby girl that is 2.” Jason said “Her husband was also killed, but some how they missed the toddler” 52
“Uh huh…” I said scratching the notes in my note book “What did she and her husband look like, what does the child look like, when where they killed, and what was their occupations.”53
Jason told me the rest of the information that I wanted. I thanked him and wished him good night, knowing her wasn’t going to get any sleep though. He was part of the werewolves hunting the vampires who where doing the killings. After I hung up on him, I flipped threw my notebook.54
The killings started about a month ago and already 23 people had died. It was defiantly the work of a vampire, or a small coven of vampires. I didn’t know if there where any new stray vampires in town, but that boy, Tyler Whitefield, was new in town. I don’t think he was part of it though, considering he just moved here.55
I closed my notebook and sighed softly. The group of werewolves who were assigned to hunt down the vampires and kill them were Jason, Brien and Derik, his two friends, Pate, and younger werewolf called Greg. They were trying their best, but it just wasn’t good enough. 56
The elder demons had decided to put some demons on the case. The demons where from my fathers clan. In fact, they were my brothers Justin and Lance. They were older then me and where the top hunters in our pack. I haven’t been home in years to see them because I was trying to live a normal human life, which wasn’t working right now.57
My brothers were even having issues trying to hunt down these vampires. They must be old to give my brothers the slip. I chuckled at the thought of my brothers getting frustrated. They hardly did, until now I bet. I bet my dad was getting frustrated as well. I could imagine his red face as he yelled, giving orders out.58
I laid on my stomach a while, as I flipped through the pages in my note book. I was just looking over the information I had gathered. All the females where basically killed the same way, except for the last one. The others had been lured into a dark ally and dump, but the last one, with her husband, was killed after coming home from a business meeting and was left in their bedroom of their house.59
Why would the killer suddenly change his killing style? I thought 60
I thought about this a while, or at least until my head started hurting. I closed my note book and set it back on the night stand. I got up, went to the medicine cabinet in the bathroom, and took some Tylenols out of their bottle. I then went down stairs and got some water from the sink. 61
As I set the glass down, I seen something move outside. I hadn’t heard or sensed anything approaching the house. I growled some and walked to the front door. As I opened the front door, the night air rushed in and I took a deep breath walking out onto the porch. 62
There were no strange smells, no other sounds but the crickets, and I didn’t see any other movements. I walked down my drive way some and looked at the roof. I couldn’t see very much so I looked around for a moment, just to see if anyone was looking. The I jumped up into a tree beside my house, then to the roof top. 63
I didn’t see anyone up there so I shrugged some and jumped from the roof. I landed with a soft thud and walked back inside, making sure I locked the doors. I stretched and yawned some. It had been a long day and I was tired. I had school tomorrow and a few test to take. I didn’t study for them, because I already knew the answers.64
I decided to go ahead and go to bed, but I just couldn’t seem to go to sleep. I kept thinking why would the murderer change his killing style. It was getting on my nerve. I rolled onto my stomach and flipped on the button to my stereo. I listened to some of the music as I eventually fell asleep.65
The morning came a little too soon as my alarm clock went off at six am. I slammed my hand down on my clock, a little to hard, and broke it.66
Dang…Now I have to go into town and buy a new one, again! I thought a little furious with myself67
I got up, brushed my teeth, dressed in my black cargos with silver chains on them, cause I had several pairs, and a black short sleeve hoodie that showed my stomach. Monica had gotten me this hoodie for my birthday this year. She was my closest human friend.68
Monica was very pretty for a human. She had long, brown hair that she normally kep in a high ponytail and dark brown eyes. She normally wore the most stylish things out, whatever they were. She wasn’t snobby like a bunch of girls from school and I was thankful for that.69
She was the only human, that I know of, that would ever come near me. At first I thought there was something wrong with her or that she was just feeling sorry for me. Over time I realized she was lonely and was just wanting a friend who didn’t think she was the world. I slowly realized what it meant to have a friend and to be a friend. We have just stuck together after the first day that I moved back here.70
Oh! I never told ya’ll but I use to live with my father in Orlando, until last year. He decided that he was gonna marry his girlfriend who’s 6 years younger then him. She has a daughter thats16 and is snobby as I don’t know what. We would always get into fights. I scared her just before I left, and she didn’t come near me after that.71
I moved back here with mom and her new mate, Mat. Mat was ok, I only met him once though. He seemed to make sure that the pack followed orders and done as told. He handled all the other businesses dealing with the other territory leaders. He also makes sure that the pack has money, incase something happens.72
I was making breakfast downstairs when my phone vibrated. I looked at it. It was a text message from Monica. I flipped my phone up reading it.73
Two new hot guys enrolled into the school! Their brothers and both of them are hot! I read the text message in my head74
I shook my head and laughed softly. That was Monica alright. Always falling over the hottest guys. She was completely unobvious to the fact that Zach likes her. 75
I hit the ‘reply’ button and started texting her back saying ‘you always think new guys are hot’ and flipped the phone closed. I went back to frying my potatoes, making hash browns. My phone vibrated again and again I flipped it up reading the text message.76
The whole girl population seem to be drooling over them I read the text message 77
I replied to the message with ‘We’ll see…’ and left it at that. I finished my hash browns and ate them. I looked at the clock and decided I might as well head to school now. I grabbed my black book bag and keys and walked out to my black Lamborghini.78
In case you haven’t figured it out, I love black and red and that my family is rich on both sides. My mother side is richer then my fathers side. I don’t know why, it just was.79
I threw my bag into the passenger seat of the Lamborghini and cranked the car up. I spun out of my drive way and sped to school. It only took me about ten minutes to get to school; due to the fact I drove about 100.80
When I got to school, I seen I wasn’t the first one there like normally. I parked on the far end of the parking lot and looked at the blue Ferrari. It was the same as Tyler’s, from yesterday. I didn’t think it was him, but he stepped out of the drivers side and another guy stepped out of the passenger side.81
The guy that stepped out of Tyler’s passenger side looked about 6’4. He had long sandy blond hair and amber eyes. He wore baggy blue jeans and a tight black shirt showing off his top half.82
I rolled my eyes slowly shaking my head. I grabbed my bag and tossed it over my shoulder as I got out of my car. I made sure to grab my keys from the ignition switch before I locked the car and shut the door. I looked up and both Tyler and his ‘brother’, I took it, was standing beside my car.83
“I would ask how you got there so quick, but you’d probably dish out some lame excuse that I have already heard before.” I said and started walking toward the doors of the school84
“Your right Tyler, that girl is strange.” I heard the other guy whisper to Tyler, thinking I wouldn’t hear85
“I know…she doesn’t seem to be ‘affected’ at all” I heard Tyler whisper back86
I rolled my eyes and shook my head. I knew they weren’t human and their vampire powers didn’t affect me like humans. If they found out I wasn’t human then they would probably slap themselves upside the head. I laughed softly to myself. 87
I walked into the school and threw my bag into my normal sit by the window. I then walked out and decided to walk around the school, just to make sure everything was fine. It was a habit I started after hearing about the killings. Hey, you never know where they were gonna strike. I just wanted to be prepared rather then unprepared.88
After making sure the school was as safe as its gonna get, I walked back toward my class room, but I stopped. I didn’t sense anyone following me before, but now I did as the air conditioner blew the sickly sweet smell toward me. My nostrils flared and I growled low. I spun around, but didn’t see anyone behind me. The smell was gone, but it lingered in my head.89
I growled and stomped my foot some. I had a feeling it was the same guy as the one at my house, but I wouldn’t be able to find out because the bell rang just then. Cursing slightly, I walked back to the class room. I stopped as I walked into the class room. Sitting next to my seat was none other then Tyler Whitefield.90
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I agree htats its a bit spoonfed... but I like it. I like all your characters... they are so.. likeable i guess.. PLEASE WRITE MORE!!!!
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I really like the style you've written in, and found it easy to understand and relate to. There were a few grammar mistakes, but I can't wait for the next chapter! ^^


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"One moment your walking home, threw a deserted ally." Your should be You're, and threw I believe should be through, the threw you have now is like "I threw the ball through the window".
OK your story is a bit of a .. amiture write. You have a wonderful story idea, but the way you put it together seem's a bit, not so great. Maybe you could insted of explaining everything right away you could put her in a bad situation like make the vampire come at her first (and a bit less cheasy "Why don't you come over here" nobodys going to listen to that) and than after she fights and get's rid of him, than explain what she is -
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i have read, many of books that had started off this way. you may not like to read as much as i do (cuz i by like 60$ worth of books at books a million everytime i go) there are many diffrent way to write, and this is just one of them. some people may think its amiture, but i find this way better then explaining when something happens and having to go into exact detail. this way, when something happens, the readers know what it is and all she has to do is describe the even before her
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