LOvE

Once you decide to grow up, you are already done. Days go past in your life, people do however you get to the idea that everything is missed-out. They look at your eyes and do not see the whole story. Some do; yet you just let them go.1

He was there. Always ... All my life. He looked into my eyes, saw the fear of my soul, my innocent heart and he touched it so softly that I got afraid again. Each night I promised to myself to hurt him. He was so able to see me inside, what I could do for love, what distances I could go for the one I love. How dare he could tell me that I loved him? Who the hell was he? Outside I was told to be a grown-up, independent woman who would not sacrifice for love. So instead of going after the love, I cheated on love; for love that was inside me.2

Then I did not know that betraying love was betraying me. The day came3

when4

he just gave up5

and 6

the other one7

looked into my eyes...8

I was flattered ...9

And now I knew how to sacrifice for the sake of love10

I looked into his eyes. Saw his soul, saw the love inside him and there I found the 11

place to fulfill my dreams of love.12

He was so afraid . How dare I could see what sacrifices he could do for love? He wanted to hurt me.13

and..14

he did.15

I am hurt now and broken. 16

Now I see that love is justice and such a mirror of you that you can not even imagine. Love is greater than your mind. You can plan everything, you can think that you can get anyone you want. However love works in corporation with God, with faith and with justice. Once you betray your love inside you, you can never fight against its gun directed at you.17

It will shoot you from the bottom of your hearth; you will find it hard to breathe18

bleeding softly, aching19

you will understand that you are dying slowly...

DID YOU EVER LOVE?

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  • Kevan gold member
    January 5
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    Great job with this, and yes, I have loved but it was not like this. The two of us were tore apart by distance, after I took our time together for granted.

    My favourite line in this was probably: "Love is justice and such a mirror of you that you can not even imagine." It's true in so many situations.

    Overall, beautiful story. Keep up the great work!

    xoxox.
    Kevan.

  • kermie4201
    January 5
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    Beautiful write. And such a feeling that is, to betray love, to know your chance of being being loved or giving love has diminished. Only one suggestion for you, the second line in the first paragraph doesnt quite make sense. Well, it makes sense, but it isnt worded correctly, is what I mean. No other errors than that as far as I can tell.