It was a dark stormy night on the cold cruel streets. My and my best friend walked side by side. For we both had no home to go to. We only had each other. For 2 years we both walked the streets. Stole, Shared, starved and shivered for 2 long years.1
I suddenly something on the floor, i swear it was money, so i told Lauren to keep on walking to our shelter (a bus stop) and i will catch up, it was only across the road. Thats when it happened. It was one of those moments when i couldn't decide who got hit, me or Lauren. It was Lauren. Her piercing scream awoke my sense and looking up i saw my worst nightmare. The car sped off and left us both helpless in the middle of the road.2
I knelt down beside her, quickly ripping off my coats, one for a pillow, one to keep her warm and i sheltered her bloody face from the rain. 'don't leave me' she said with a doomed voice. 'ok' i replied. 3
A car came by, she was saved, right? No. He sped straight off. another 2 cars did this, how could they? Then, like a gift from God, one car stopped. He heard my quick, un clear, story and handed me his mobile. He retrieved, and also sped off into the night. Going home to his family he was.4
We both waited patiently for the ambulance, but i knew it was a waste of time. All i could do was listen to my dearest friend as her breaths got less and less. with her last ever breath and facial expression, she did what she made me do, and what she did best..........laugh and smile.5
I started down in disbelief. Her dead, glass, green eyes looked up at mine. I closed them with a faint whisper. 'we shall walk again soon'6
The ambulance arrived. They gave me back my coats and drove away with my best friend. My tears, colder than the rain itself, fell like the torrential down pour around me. I walked the streets, doomed to be alone, then i remembered something.7
Heaven is a beautiful place8
Its where you belong9
And i cant wait to see your face10
You showed me right from wrong.11
I remember all the things you did do12
As i look up at the moon13
I then remember my last words to you14
In heaven, we shall walk again soon.15
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Comments
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Wow, the last bit is touching. You re-told your dream well, yet it was chilling, but written in a beautiful style. Well done, sorry I haven't commented in so long, keep writing xXx
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excellent
Awww no this is a horrible nightmare!! Not a dream!!
I'm glad it was just a nightmare cause its really really sad and i can't believe Lozz died
That sux.. and the fact that nobody cared.. meep i'm glad lotsa people care in real life, it kinda makes you realise how lucky we all are to have our homes and friends
I really loved the ending as well, the little rhyme was really good but took away a bit of the sadness... to make it seem like she had gone to a better place... Nice piece, although nearly made me cry
Love ya lots
*~*Charlotte*~*
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I know you told me about this....but still im in shock.....speachless. it was so beautiful...it made me cry!!
i started to cry with the lines...'with her last ever breath and facial expression, she did what she made me do, and what she did best..........laugh and smile.' and the poem at the end finished it off perfectly. i loved this...n i love you!! and if it was changed around and you were the one who died i dont know what id do. i love you!!
this was so awsome!
Luv Loz x x x


